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Pretty LIttle Girl

Pretty and Skinny on the outside
always smiling over what some found unexcitable
but old, and filthy on inside
the little girl wants what they call a life.
Friends and boyfriend galore and yet there's nothing more.
Boys are in love, but with on touch they want what they only thought
This pretty little girl no longer wants to live.
The walls of her imagination only seem to becoming true.
Suffocating her with the words of what she's always told.
Pretty and Skinny, but filthy on the inside, this girl no longer has a need to survive
This pretty little girl smiles no more.

Author notes

Once again, I don't know if this poem makes sense, if it does than WHAOO! And if it doesn't please give me some hints. Tell me what u think. Please and Thank u
Written September 4th, 2006

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  • Dygurl
    September 27, 2006
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    very angsty dramatic right. i think that alot of people can relate to this, hopefully not to the point of suicide, but a very emotoinal write. awesome job! haven't heard fro you in awhile how are you? good i hope


  • Nightmare-Anatomy
    September 21, 2006
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    this poem was really good. i think a lot of girls can relate to it. we all pretty much live double lives. personally. i'm more or less just a fake in front of everyone. it's kind of sad and pitiful. this poem has those exact emotions in it. it was so amazing. and it rang truth. you're a really good writer. and if you stop posting poems here on ap...then i'll hunt you down. lol. cuz i'm pretty sure i'd miss them like hell! anyways,great right hunny! i loved it so much.
    *autumn*

  • AMEgirly
    September 15, 2006
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    wow. very good. sad but good. u defintaly cant judge sum1 by the outside and think oh if shes pretty and skinny then she has a perfect life cus no1 rele nos. u kno? well awesome job!

  • BreakingxThexHabit
    September 6, 2006
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    Jonsie i fucking love this. Especially the ending. I always love your sad poems. See you around. love you tons!

    Isabel

  • xXxSilentCryxXx
    September 5, 2006
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    Woah.. This was really sad. I hope this wasn't personal. I got really confused reading this, i dont know why. The ending was so sad and hit me hard because i can relate to it. In a way. The lines about the pretty little girl are really really depressing. I really really hope this isnt about you.
    x[x]x

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