I thought she loved me.
She said she did.
But the tide that took us away
Is still carrying me to this day
And nothing but nothing can turn back the waves.
I thought she'd stay with me.
She said she would.
But the loving touches we shared,
Just could not keep her there
And I am emptier because of it.
I thought I would be a man now,
At least that's what my friends all said
But the kid that I still see
In the mirror looking back at me
Knows this is not the case.
I have not given up on love though,
But sometimes I tell myself this.
This act of love should be shared
When both of the parties do care
Or you may regret what you wished.
Author notes
This is a bummer, but my first relationship didn't end well and I wish I had waited. Sounds dumb coming from a guy, but I wish I had waited. This is about that first time. Tell her to make sure that the guy she's with is on the same page as she is. Sometimes we (and I use the term "we" as universal for male) are just after the moment and don't have a committment in mind.
Written September 4th, 2006
A contest entry
- How Do You Explain This???(Contest) by trista.
300 points, ended September 9, 2006, 16 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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If I had known the contest you entered this poem in was up and running when it was, I would have entered it also.
It's on a touchy subject for some.
This write is unique, though. It's cool that a guy wrote something like this. That's different for a change.
The whole stereotype of a one night-stand/ordeal/whatever is usually thought of differently. In this case, you were a victim (a guy, obviously) and that's one thing that isn't cliche.
When we think of this kind of stuff most would usually think of a girl being the poor and hopeless victim. You can't argue with me about that.
But, reality proves that girls can be cunning and hurtful, too - just as some guys can be.
I'm sorry for your awful experience. It's good that you haven't given up on love, though.
I've always wanted to know how some guys feel about this kind of stuff, considering many of them don't share exactly. Kudos on writing this. You've opened up a lot of doors when it comes to my thoughts, now.
It makes me have a little more faith in my boyfriend, personally - just knowing that guys can have similar feelings every once in awhile instead of being exact opposites.
Beautiful write!
Sincerely,
SweetExPoSuRe <3
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haha, well I said I'd return the favor, but i guess i already have . I still like this piece. Infact, I loved it
Madison -
Amen to your authors comments. Most of the guys that i know and are my age never let on that they have feelings or emotions or that they don't think of girls as sex gods. It's really immature but i supose they'll catch up eventually. I loved your poem but i liked your author's comments better. Good writes!
Madison -
Wow, it is so lovely (you have no idea) to hear it from a guy. I really love this. My ex-boyfriend and i are still friends but, he was my first "fallen hard in-love" love. Thank you for writing this, much luv, Duckie.
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wow, this was really great!! i really apreciate these words coming from a guy, its not too often you hear this kind of thing, i must say its refreshing. i esp. liked this part
But the tide that took us away
Is still carrying me to this day
And nothing but nothing can turn back the waves.
love it!!
~m -
Excellent
I am so sorry! This is a wonderful write. I can compare to this. I still wonder what I did wrong in my relationship. I am sorry about what has happened to you.
This is a wonderful poem! I loved it. I have never to this day found a poem so eloquently written of the sorrows of love. This is an amazing write, and the authors comments were wonderful, for that gave great advice. Thank you for sharing all of this with us, I know how difficult that must have been.
Aidenn -
First of all, let me say I'm so sorry that I somehow missed this entry earlier! As a contest host I feel it is my responsibility to comment on poems soon after they are entered, so the author at least knows the entry has been read. I am usually very careful about making sure I check often...so again, I'm very sorry.
As to your poem...WOW. Coming from a guy, this is just wonderful as I've often wondered how the perspective might differ from a girl's point of view. It's sad that the relationship did not last, and I think you gave some wonderful advice in your author's notes. Your poem is well written and well thought out. Thank you so much for having the courage to share a guy's point of view, and best of luck to you in the contest!
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sweet
This is beautiful,and i am sorry....me and my boyfriend have broken up so many times...but we are so in love it doesnt even matter anymore,we know we are meant for each other...you will find somebody,sweetheart.
xoxoxoxo,
megan 8rose*
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