Just One More Day To Hold You
What would I do with one more day,
searching my heart for what to say.
First I would pull you close to me,
wrapped in your arms so tenderly.
Thoughts wandering of happy days,
that fill our heart like sunlit rays.
Whispering what is in my thoughts,
the happiness your love has brought.
I would look deep to see your pain,
how your heart was filled with rain.
I would hold you through the night,
to keep you from your fateful plight.
I would plead, please stay with me.
release your pain, please set it free.
Do not listen to death's dark call,
because I need you most of all.
I'd let you feel, new life begin,
our baby grows, feel love within.
I would make you see, it was wrong,
to kill yourself with death's sad song.
If I could hold you just once more,
show you what life is worth living for.
Then all these years of pain would leave,
I could still hope, could still believe.
Since then, happiness is fleeting,
so much longing, so much needing.
Still searching for how love should be,
for one more day, come back to me.
Author notes
A personal story of losing someone I loved to suicide. And how every since, wrong choices have led to so much heartache. But I have my faith as I struggle with my life. There is good in my life too. A hard poem to write.
Written September 4th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- One More Day by Heavenly Angel.
300 points, ended September 9, 2006, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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May I say
This is one wonderful piece of poetry. You have touch me deep inside my friend
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Great Writing
Sandy, this write pulls the reader in and allows us the opportunity to feel your pain and experience the sadness. Being able to that is a true gift of the pen. My heart goes out to you and I'm so glad you have your faith. Thank you for sharing this most personal piece. Very Well Done! -
Oh Sandy
This is so tender and loving!
Beautifully written with so much devotion and love to the one you have lost My sympathy to you upon losing this dear soul. You're poem has expressed such sorrow.
Best wishes in the contest my dear friend!
Let the light of love shine within your heart knowing your love is being returned!
Linda
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Very Sad
Wow, sorry you had to bear such sadness. This piece is so beautiful, and the longing is expressed within its words. May God bless you as you search. -
Sandy This one truly touched my heart to tears
I have lost loved ones in my life but never one to suicide and so I cannot begin to imagine the lost felt there...
Thank you for sharing your piece
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Hi, a very lovely and touching poem,it is not an easy subject to write about when someone takes their own life, it leaves us with a feeling of helplessness and a million questions, good write you have my applause, hugs Di
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Excellent
A beautiful, sad and very heartfelt write. You have bared all your emotions which makes thie piece so powerful. I am so sorry for your loss but you have certainly written your feelings so well.Amazing write.
Gaylene
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this is such a sad, sweet, tender poem. it tears
at you as you read it. I am sorry that you had
to experience this. it is truly a sad thing. -
Such a heartwrenching piece of writing but so well put together and a great use of imagery. I am so sorry for your loss and offer you my deepest wishes.
Claire -
Sad & Heartfelt
Wow... This is definately a sad and heartfelt piece of raw emotion. Sorry for your loss. You have conveyed the deep loss with your words incredibly well. Well written.
Dimitri -
I’m sorry that you lost this person I liked the rhyme here, this was a very well written piece with good flow. I liked the way that you personified death with ‘death’s dark call’ and ‘death’s sad song’. There was some hope which flowed from your clear love/friendship for this person but also a great deal of sorrow in their death.
Best wishes
Pozo
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Beautifully put.I don't know what I would do but you have a near perfect way of dealing with it.A well thought out write, Ros
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I like this piece.
I agree with speakingup4kids. Sometimes it is so hard to explain to a person how you feel. But you did a fine job on this piece. It is very well done. -
it may have been a hard poem to write, but you wrote it so well.
it is so beautiful,
very touching,
life can be so hard at times i know,
but just like you said there is some good in ones life too.
sorry for your loss,
keep your faith and may Gog always be with you and yours.
Joyce
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I'd let you feel, new life within,
our baby grows, let life begin.
I would make you see, it was wrong,
to kill yourself with death's sad song
I was doing good reading this until I got to that stanza...
I can feel your pain so much in this piece and that stanza just confirmed it for me. You do such remarkable writes, as usual, you have pulled the reader in and held them hostage to the very end of this piece. Thank you so much for sharing your talent!
very nice job!
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