joyful spring is here
trees leaf,flowers bloom,birds sing
windows ope,warm breeze
summer is with us
hot humid days,torrid nights
conditioner on
pretty fall's arrived
bright colored leaves in the trees
windows ope,cool breeze
winter woes with us
iced roads,blowing snow,freezing
windows closed,heats on.
Author notes
Written April 18th, 2003
A contest entry
- Your favorite Season by oreogoddess1219.
600 points, ended April 3, 2004, 17 entries
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wow
what a beautiful haiku chain very charming it flowed nice you gave great imagery masterfully done!!
pretty fall's arrived
bright colored leaves in the trees
windows ope,cool breeze
wonderful Haiku I really like this form and you have done an awesome job!! Best of luck to you in the contest and keep them coming!! -
Well seasoned set of haiku, respecting 5 7 5 of traditional writing with an uncommon common denominator of no spacing after commas ... yet this appears to have been written in April rather than amidst the comatose comma toes winter woes
given the state of the windows in the first and third stanzas one might have meant to seize on 'ope for hope as a seasonable state of affairs
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option in author's note? assuming it's transition? if i'm wrong let me know, haha.
i like the use of the form, the short stanzas representing each season. and especially the repetition of the air conditioner, heat and the breezes through the window, that's pretty clever
thanks for submitting! -
Very clever, and oh so true.
Thanks for entering.
Bell,
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this is beautiful!
i do love haiku, though i am terrible at writing them myself. =P
good work + good luck!
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nice work,its short and delightfull
thanks for enteringand best of luck -
Very nice, my favorite option, too =] I DO need the option number in the notes, though. Thank you for entering.
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Four seasons. Pretty cool. Or warm, or is it hot? Anyway, It's pretty cool how you could describe each season in only 3 lines. I liked al except for it was kinda short, but thats my only bug. Keep it up
Ravyn
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very good poem and all but I'm sorry to say I have to disqualify you because the contest was your favorite season. And you wrote about each season
I'm sorry.
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