A daughter you say is on her way,
what will she be like,
who will she look like,
what will I do,
what will I say,
am I ready,
she'll be here anyway.
A daughter to wear ribbons in her hair,
as she kicks the winning goal.
Who will dress up in lace and
wear black make-up.
Who will talk on the phone for
hours while really not saying
anything. Who will proudly
take me to school for parents day.
Someone I'll worry over on her
first date, after I grilled her
date, of course.
A daughter who looks beautiful
on her wedding day, as I sadly
give her away. My pride and joy
as my first grandchild is born.
This child I have yet to see,
her skinned knees, learning
to ride her bike. Her first
driving lesson in my car,wincing
as she strips gears. This the
fruit of my loins, for daughters
are special to fathers as sons
are to mothers. These things are
in the future but, she will be here now,
and I sure can't wait.
Author notes
While I'm not quite sure about writing from a father's point of veiw, I just remember watching my husband with our daughter and my father with me and my sisters.
Written September 3rd, 2006
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Merry meet tigerlily56,
Thank you for your applause and I'm glad that you like.
Amythest -
A really lovely poem, good luck in the contest.
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This is such a lovely heartfelt poem, and it flows so well.
Well done. -
beautiful poem
Awww...this is such a beautiful poem
Lovely in it's own right
I wish you nothing but the best of luck in the contest
Keep up the great writing always
Stay safe
~Amanda
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how sweet. you really did this well. I commend you on a good write =]
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sweet as can be the releationship with a child one never stops the wondering great writing here and daughters are the best they rule....hahahha best of luck to the couple who awaits....
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Merry meet Knight,
Thank you for your wonder thoughts on my poem. I'm glad that you enjoyed it.
Amythest -
Merry meet paullallady,
Thank you for your wonderful compliments. The contest holder did not want any sad or bitter moments in the poem as they were
expecting their first child, a daughter.
*rose
Amythest -
Exceptional
awww this is a really nice poem, I have 2 daughters so I understand the unknowing and nervous excitement of parenthood!! -
I think you did a wonderful job of putting yourself in the eyes of a father. And I like the point you make that daughters are important to fathers. It is an interesting observation. From a poem mechanics view, I don't see much that I would change. It conveys your thoughts and emotions well, and I think if you were to change it to fit some form or rhyme scheme you would have to drastically alter the message. I enjoyed this, thank you
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this is so sweet and tender. And to try and
imagine the different scenes yet to come with
an unborn baby girl, that is cute. just
remember reality isn't always as pretty but
sometimes is better and sweeter. -
Merry meet,
Thank you for your applause. I think that
I don't really know what to say. I'm glad that your really like it. Good luck to you and your husband.
Amythest -
Awww, this is such a sweet poem. It is so good to see someone write the actual poem through the eyes of an expecting father. I really liked this, and even though you said you weren't sure about writing it from a father point of view, I personally feel that you have penned this very wonderfully. I don't think anyone else could of came closer then an actually father writing it. This is truly one of the most beautiful, and heartfelt poems I have read. Thank you so much for taking the time to pen this and enter it into the contest. Best of wishes!
Midnight
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