Lick lace and leather up long legs to lingerie.
Own me. Openly oppress me and I will obey.
Venture through my varied velvets. Violate!
Excite erotic energy. Incarcerate!
Buckle me in boots. Restrain and blind-fold me.
Open mind. Lash. Bind. Obsess on my obscenity.
Oh hungry hands held down with heat, succumb to this.
Thigh-high. Tease and tie. Restrict and kiss.
Stilettos, straps. Sweet, soleful slaps. All sado-bliss.
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Author notes
OK, 3rd draft - any thoughts?
(And yes, the spelling of "soleful" is intentional - it's a boot-pun).
LB
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Written September 3rd, 2006
A contest entry
- What is that supposed to mean???? by skyviewexpress.
300 points, ended September 6, 2006, 29 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Girlfriend! You so bad! And, so very creative. NO, I'm
not trying to kiss up. This is great. I love it. I love acrostics, anyway. You're very talented. Shancy.
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Heya Loveboots, this is a fab acrostic and the imagery is wicked, Keep it up?
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this was fucken delicious! you delivered a sexy write dear i love and can appreciate something sexy in a write ok you have me intrested so what else you got for mrs. lady enthralling?
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Awesome!
I can't say that I don't love this, because I'm not a liar. This is a very seductive work you have created. I find it extremley enticing. I've read it, twice.
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blissfull moment
i found this sexy from start to finish. GOOD WORK
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What a nice poem. I was just thinking thoughts EXACTLY like this last weekend as I lay naked on my nearest nudist beach, watching ugly people desport themselves shamelessly.
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Shubs - I'd love to hear what you want to say! I'm just not very good at decoding the way you say it!
Hope you're ok.
LB
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I am sorry if my comments do not make sense to you.
I will refrain.I will remember. -
This was awesome I agree with spamwitch lol. made me blush. ALso made me think lol. Woooahoo you go on.. great job am gald I literally stumbled across this one. Very impressive.
Vsutton
BSt of Luck to you. Dont really think you'll need it. -
Vividly written, seems REAL!
Very intresting acrostic. The topic is unique, vividly worded, you done an excellent job on balance and rhyme. I love the format, and it speaks to me about your talent and imagery...AWESOME! write ON!.........ennovy
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I swear this made me
What a great play on your name... 
or is it?? I like what you did with this, you are a great talent with many variations to your writing. I'm afraid to ask for great details though...
Hmm.. though my name is spamwitch..what the hell could be up with that? Best of luck to you in the contest! 
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Yes Loveboots, I like the revised version much better. It seems to flow better. You did a good job with the revision.
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Good
Very sexy write....... I like it.... -
Shubs - thanks for you comment - any chance you could post it again in words that make sense? I fear I am missing soemthing.
LB
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Barefoot - (I guess we don't share taste in footwear!) So many thanks for your comment on LOVEBOOTS! I hadn't even noticed how bad that was!
I have altered the line to fix the rhyme - please could you tell me what you think now?
Thanks again.
LB
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With loveboots to fit no one so acrostic as you in your ecstatic rendition of eroticism bare dare and much more in the rhymes that chime and chimes that rhyme the essence of the via media so mentioned and the explicit corraboration of the gist writ large over the expanse of this treatise is the wonderland that is your hinterland
Shubs
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Solid set of seductive wordings... me likey. The first stanza rhyme of Lick lace and leather up long legs to lingerie,
Obey obsessions, oozing with intensity,
got me off on a strange rhyme... didnt seem even a near rhyme, but maybe its my pronunciation. You could f#$% with intensitae, or some such fun.
other than that. strap me, slap me, and call me content.
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For a rough draft this is pretty darn good. A lot of great vivid imagery and a lot said without being over the top. Well written and a very good read.
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excellent
wow, i am very tantalized, tickled and teased....lol
megsmom -
Open mind and heart. So open-mouthed - go orally.
Oh hungry hands held down with heat, succumb to this.
Thigh-high. Tease and tie. Restrict and kiss.
Stilettos, straps. Sweet, soleful slaps. All sado-bliss.
welldone loveboots...
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Skyviewexpress - Thank you for your comment, I have edited the poem slightly and entered it in the contest. I am VERY grateful to you for accepting the entry.
LB
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Thanks Pollycheck. Want to have a look at the slightly re-worked version?
LB
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Sado Bliss! Yeah! I like this acrostic ... of course I would. LOL Well done.
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lol nice poem, I'm glad I gave you an extra day on this one, it was rather good! It was smooth and fast pace, and I loved some of the word choices in it like.... "unbalance me", "Buckle me in boots. Restrain" very nicely written and well worth my time! Thank you for entering and good luck in my contest.... (hopefully you will)
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I think that you are almost there if this is just a rough draft. I like the meter and the rhyme theme. it is always harder to do a rhyming acrostic. You definitely pasinted a very vivid picture with your words. I thought I was going to need a cold shower after reading it. Have only one other comment.
Excite erotic energy. Incarcerate!
Buckle me in boots. Restrain. Unbalance me.
The second line seems a little bit out off place. The words Unbalance me don't seem to work that well for me, but I just might be interpreting them wrong. Not sure if this would fit in with what you are trying to convey, but maybe something like this:
Excite erotic energy. Incarcerate!
Buckle me in boots. Restrain. Ravage me.
or maybe:
Excite erotic energy. Incarcerate!
Buckle me in boots. Restrain. Belittle me.
Just some thoughts of a dirty old man.
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