When I glare out of a window
Clear beyond the deep blue skies
I visualize a time made for you and I
Where all the dreams that have come
To pass
Are present victories made to last
What we expect throughout the years
Will be reality with fears.
When I glare out a window
Clear beyond the deep dark skies
I see a special nova made for you and I
We can grasp it or let it fade
For in the horizon prosperity is made
What is never searched for
Will never be sought
What is never sought is forever
Lost in the darkness.
Author notes
Written September 3rd, 2006
A contest entry
- Writing That Is You by LovelyTayBaby.
400 points, ended September 11, 2006, 4 entries
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oh! sorry! I read your authors comment box and then just assumed! Guess I was a little tired, huh?
my bad. Thank you!
You are one of about 4 that actually put huzzah down!
GO you!
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The Queen -
huzzah?
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its there!!
huzzah is there already.
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This is really descripitve, and the imagery is perfect. I can see each detail you speak of. (I think the background is perfect, by the way.
It is a poem of huge hope and future; excellent job. However, I wanted to mention that I think you mean "to pass", not "to past" in your fifth line. Other than that, I'd say it's the best so far!
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Great write
This poem is so true. You do actually go into a sort of trance when peering out of the window. I find this more so, especially when it is raining.
You are looking out but not actually looking at anything. Your mind is far away somewhere in the distance.
Wondering if you will grasp opportunities made, or let them pass you buy. Wondering if you will get back with your partner again, wanting to grasp that opportunity with him/her, that comes around.
Looking out of the window can set your mind racing over so many different things. And the glass absorbs all of your thoughts and fears and sorts of reflects them back to you. Great write. -
Hmm. Deep and insightful. You have said alot with this piece. I relate to this so well. A dream never reached is a dream lost. Excellent piece, Yola. Good luck in the contest.
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And we must wonder whether what we want is best left there. I love this poem, I can relate to it, but in a way that I didn't think I would. hmm... weird.
Great free verse, there aren't many out there that can put them together as well as you have. Thank you for your comment on my poem, it was much appreciated.
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