A Welling Emotion
Testing and tasting, wells of emotion
Required more, drinking of potion
Stream of desire, welled down under
Untapped reserve, thirsty with wonder
Unable to drink, unable to touch
Rusty old pail, leaked way too much
Patching the bucket, attaching a rope
Into the well, welling with hope
Drawing up water, filled to the top
Splitting the pail, a watering flop
Needing a pail, from pails I drew
An emotional pail, I'm dipping for you
Refilling with rhyme, writing with speed
Fill up your well, your desire of need
My pencil is primed, my eraser exact
My paper is ready, my well to extract
Great to be sitting visiting thoughts
Dreams to be written, unraveling knots
Writing a rope, penning a will
Pailing a hope, welling to fill
Rudolf
Author notes
Emotions run deep, deep as a well but you need to have water and drink it as well. Hope you enjoy this piece
Written September 3rd, 2006
A contest entry
- Anything you wish by crazymomma.
450 points, ended April 16, 2008, 13 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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wonderful imagery, and metaphor and just plain fantastic writing! Congratulations on winning Silver.
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I love the metaphore and imagery. "into the well, welling with hope" I love this line. So many great poems, how will I ever decide. Thanks for entering
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In the second line of the second stanza, 'leaked way to much' should be 'leaked way too much'... apart from that this is an amazing poem, I love the way you have rhymed so well! The rhythm is wonderfully created and maintained - the message is expressed in creative terms - all in all I really enjoyed this piece
Keep writing
Polly
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VERY well done! I must applaude you on the way that you kept the cadence and beat of this piece from beginning to end. I re-read this piece, and just for fun, tried reading it as fast as I could, and with your word choice it was actually quite easy.
As for the meaning of the poem...another wonder in and of itself. I love the idea of an "emotional well" filled with so much inspiration, but a pail that is rusty and wobbly and not easy to manage.
Overall, only praise for this one!
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Wow. This really is a great write. I really enjoyed this part:
Refilling with rhyme, writing with speed
Fill up your well, your desire of need
My pencil is primed, my eraser exact
My paper is ready, my well to extract
I just imagine a crazed poet sitting at a writing desk, ready, poised, and going quite crazy.
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Well! after such huge efforts to extract the content I'm sure some impressive reserves of emotion will flood from your pen for all to drink deeply of...
an interesting take on visiting the depths to refill your poetic fountain. May it never run dry.
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Excellent
Oh WOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I haven't read a perfectly penned piece of poetry like this, in such a long time.
Well done my friend.
Well done.
Keep up with the great work.
Keep on penning.
Thank you so very much for sharing your talent with us.
*S* Cynthia
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Excellent
This was a beautifully penned metaphoric write, what a talent you are my friend. It is always such a pleasure to read your work Love the smooth pursuit from beginning to end, just captivating me ~Tia
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I smile each time I read the first stanza. especially the last line of that first stanza....perfect.
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this was really good. especially for a collaboration. its very hard to get two different styles to flow so well togeather.
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Great work.
This is great!
I love the mid paced flow, and the relation between lines and break downs.
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Emotional Greatness
kinda confusing, but i know exactly how u feel, its kinda sad yet happy, its so cool how u expressed your point in this. i love it -
Expressive
Wonderful metaphor, clever and still easily understood. Well worth the second read
I love the way you used the drawing of water from the well in comparison to use of poetry to get in touch with your emotions and desires. My favorite phrase is "Writing a rope, penning a will ~ Pailing a hope, welling to fill" Great summation. I guess my only critique is the next to last line of the next to last stanza, perhaps a comma between primed and my???
How's that for a heavy crit
I think anyone who writes can relate to this one. Kudos to you!
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wow I really enjoyed this piece for it was a great metaphor for emotion and what not. The well concept was a great way of explaining how you felt. The vocab and originality in this was amazing. Keep up the good work, for I enjoyed this immensly
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very good
good one rudolf - nice rhyme and flow - i'll need to read it once more to get the exact drift of it - keep on keeping on rudolf - hope to see you soon - joe -
Clever stuff. Nice poem
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friggin sweet
wow this is really good. i loved ur rhyming patterns that were so exact. it all fitted together perfectly. nice work.
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Great work
WOW.This is all i can say. I cant begin what verse i loved the most.Its good work.It should be in a book.Love it.Made me think differently and ponder on what you said. L.O.V.E. IT!!!!!!
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