Secretly I whisper you name
So that you will live in my short term thoughts
Never quite feeling the same
Secretly not being caught
When our rendezvous becomes lustful
At the secret place that we meet
As our passion becomes bountiful
Resisting the excitement of your heat
What secrets do you have in store?
As my hips feel a familiar touch
Blindly tied firmly to the floor
Feeling this is a little bit much
Renewing my thoughts with your whispers
Pressing your lips forceful to mine
As binds cause pleasure blisters
Secretly never crossing the line
As your mouth proceeds its traveling
Across my body on your secret quest
This libido is what I’m battling
Through my climax I do confess
The seductive secret we share
As we meet to fulfill our needs
Our lustful arrangement most any where
Committed relations we don’t heed
Yet our sinful thoughts meet actions
We denied ourselves for so long
While we secretly defy the factions
That admonished our passions as wrong
Our eyes fail to make acquaintance
As we part our separate ways
Yet secretly we pay penance
Waiting for the next secret day
Author notes
Option 1
Thoughts in a lonely hotel room away from home
Written September 2nd, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Deep from the heart by perozo.
300 points, ended September 20, 2006, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Secrets... {5 Options!} by ScrewAllOfYou.
900 points, ended September 29, 2007, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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To me, this is an excellent poem. Very passionate and sensual. There is many phrases that I really likec so it's hard to pick one, but I like your opening words:
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Thank you - crazy thoughts of a woman knocking at my door in a hotel. Went a little long.
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Amazing! I like this, very much.
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Thank U !!
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Fulfilling a lust that no one knows about, going at it only once in a while, shows that there must be another person involved that you're trying to hide all this from. That is a secret indeed, for making sure that stays hidden at all costs is very hard. I love the rhyming. Good write and good luck.
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Thanks - lonely day dreams of some one brought this on. Thats something that is best imagined not lived. Thanks for the great review. ~ MyKey
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a wonderful poem with a beautiful flow, good luck!
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big grin thanks so much!!
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a wonderful poem with a beautiful flow, good luck!
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great job I love the romantic sigh i feel from this. it is a great sensual write. keep penning
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I really effing love this poem.
I think it's relative to a lot of people.
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VERY BEAUTIFUL
What a beautiful and sensual poem you have penned here My-key. Love the name. I may be biased on that. Your poem was quite lovely and a pleasure to read this morniung. Thank you for reading my poem. I so appreciate it. Take care, Sandy
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I appreciate your kind words
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fantastic creative prose
This a very vivid piece, well worded, and so romantic. It like the distant lover Marvin Gaye sang about. Your mind & heart are ther yet your so far away. Beautiful imagery and so lustful. ... . ... . write ON!. ... ennovy
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thankya
This piece i wanted to center on the words secret. If you see how I repeated it in each stanza. I wanted limited images I expressed and placed what the reader felt would be secretive to them in their own mind. Asking for much but I tend to like that in people who read my work and as I read theirs ~ Thanks for the advice. I do appreciate it. MYkeeeeeee -
Your poem flows very well and it is almost an obsessive flow, which adds to the theme of an obsessive lust! Even though I'm stubborn on what types of themes I like when I read poems, I enjoyed this poem.
I cannot critique on your style either, as this poem is well written. I think the only thing that your poem might benefit more from is more vivid imagery.
Keep on penning!
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Thank you so much. Sometimes untilthe time is right you have to let life take its course. Good or bad ~L8tr mikEEEEEEEEEEEEEE -
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Yeah she's special. Thanks Lane. Women should be worshipped. I just do my share ((smile)) ~MIKeeeeeeeeeee -
Very well written. Beautiful, in fact. And, from the many kisses left behind, I gather your muse feels the same...
Love,
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beautiufl and passionate. it is somewhat sad in the end, but you leave us in hope. I thought the flow was good. good luck in the contest.
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Wonderful
This is so beautiful My-Key, I am so happy that I can be of inspiration to you, it would be wonderful to able to make your words become reality, but for now we are have make do, with dreams and words through cyberspace, thank you again. Talk to later.
raingoddess .
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