A minute is like an hour.
An hour is like a day.
A day is like a year.
Time goes exactly slow to me, it seemed,
at whenever we are apart.
I am truly a loser,each time without you.
There is nothing I can do if I ain't got you.
I'm losing myself to live in a dream.
Because there ... I can be with you any time.
There ... I can feel your gentle embrance ,
There ... I can feel the sweet of your kisses ,
and just there ... I can feel your tender love once again.
I'd leave the whole world to stay with you there together,
to a place that endless of happiness and no sad.
Everyone know I love you so much, it is true.
My feelings I have for you will never change.
Please remember that in every tic of the clock,while you're away.
I miss you ever more and more..
So please darling , come back soon.
Come to me cuz I'm waiting for you here,
at this place we called " our home "
Author notes
A short note to Elmar!
I miss you so bad! Come back home soon ..
Written September 2nd, 2006
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Excellent
Wow this is definatly an excellent write. You put a lot of emotion into it. Great job. Sooo I haven't been on here in a long time. Glad to see everyone still writes. I haven't put up any new poems in a long time. My rents "banned" me from here, but I'm still writing just like I was but better. Well just thought I'd stop in and say hi. I always liked your poems. Peace. SINcerly -Amanda* -
this has a lot of emotion to it... great write here good luck with your writing
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Auuuu hunny. You and Elmar deserve to be happy all of the time. You and I are very lucky to have found such amazing guys who cherish us. I wish you and darling Elmar the best of luck, hehe you are such a pretty couple too. Until our next email.
Hopefully i will be able to read some more poems now that i have some free time. [maybe even write a poem or two myself - maybe]
Love yah heaps girlie,
xx
Love Kal -
This is a very good write that you had penned here
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Beautiful!!!
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I really liked this. I know what it is like to lose a lover and feel alone.
I really liked these lines..
I'm losing myself to live in a dream.
Because there ... I can be with you any time.
There ... I can feel your gentle embrance ,
There ... I can feel the sweet of your kisses ,
and just there ... I can feel your tender love once again.
this was beautiful.
keep writing.
peace *&* love always,
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Love is sometimes harsh but in a good way, it lets us know that we love someone, it lets us know that we are human, lol. you did a wonderful job on this poem, i loved reading it, you are a great poet, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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I LIKED YOUR POEM VERY MUCH!!!Full of love and affection.I liked third stanza its so nice and sound so lovely i liked it.It is a very creative work.I wish that whoever u r missing will come soon!
A very good text!!!!!
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wow...I totally liked this piece. It's like how I be feeling at times...alone waiting patiently but yet in a hurried sort of way...I believe I'm feeling that way right about now after I read this. Thanks for the share. Bless you.
victoria -
Wonderful job describing missing someone..We have all been there. It was a very easy read and flowed nicely. Great job
Soulful Woman -
I can sorta relate I know what its lie to miss some one so deepy any way good write keep them coming
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good
I'm losing myself to live in a dream.
Because there ... I can be with you any time.
There ... I can feel your gentle embrance ,
There ... I can feel the sweet of your kisses ,
and just there ... I can feel your tender love once again
I think we each have felt this way over a loved one that we are apart from and you describe it so well. good job. -
such touching words you miss him very deeply you write says so great job and hope you see him so.....
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Hello Puppydog :
Thank you very much for your kindly comment. I'm happy to see you again since I've been truly busy lately.
Anyway, I'm glad you like this poem and I was really excitment if there is someone would like my poem again cuz I didnt really write anything in last 5-6 months ago.Thanks once again and I do really wish I could have talk with you again in soon , too.
take care.
Paper. -
DEEPLY TOUCHING AND SWEET
Such sweet and touching thoughts my dear friend, I am sure this person is deeply touched as they read this.
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Thank you very much for the comment Maheo - much appreciated. I'm glad you liked the poem and sorry for there are some error spelling , Iam going to correct them now as your advise.
Papergirl -
All in all I like it, but in the third stanza there are a few problems that take away from the flow
"loosing" should be "losing"
"becuase" should be "because"
5th stanza, you forgot the word "the"
"in every tic of _the_ clock"
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