The crux of this Eden museum
is what to do with the rib.
Eve never needed it.
Adam never missed it.
It wasn't a family heirloom
Only God's need for a wand
or maybe he felt man
should pay to be
mated. Who knows
the workings of God.
His PR men keep saying
the same thing over and over
"Praise him"
Get a life will you.
As soon as we went back
found out he did create it.
Eden became a fundamental
starting point on the map.
We found the rib.
Somebody had kicked it under
the Tree of Knowledge.
09/02/06
1:01 AM
Alexandria, VA
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I always figure that laughter is one of the ways God shares his love. He enjoys the quirks and oddity of the corners of his universe with as much joy as saintlyness. I figure this worked well even if I had to use his metaphors.
Thank you for enjoying it so much.
Even more for sharing the glee. Love, Tom B.
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This piece is relgiously witty! I loved it. The ending was unexpected, yet could hold truth, and everything fell into place. You keep the flow constant, the imagery surrounds us, and your sense of humor has kindled our hearts to chuckle with each beat. Keep up the great work!
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This came out of nowhere. But it made me laugh to write it. I am glad you enjoyed my sense of humor. Perhaps even God would smile about this, but he works in mysterious ways. Love, Tom B.
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LOLOL! What a painful thing that was, too, kicking that rib under the tree of knowlege. Tomis, you rascal! This is priceless, but now my mind is doing doubletime wondering what was the catalyst for this poem. I have to thank you; you brightened my evening and put me to thinking what else could be with that rib!
love you,
Karen
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Interesting. I'm young. The words you use, and the way you write confuses me. I have very poor English Education. and I'm greatly Angered by this. Its difficult. I Get bits and pieces of this poem. but its nothing to me.. I don't see it.. I wish I did. from what I can see. This is a good Poem. Flows well. But utterly misterious to me..
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You cannot make light of religious beliefs. Putting that aside and viewing your writting as a piece of art, I would consider it a great piece and would think of you as the Milton of today. However if you see the light as John Milton had done and eulogised God and his works, you will come up with some amazing sonnets. On the whole, it was a work great talent viewing things from the lighter side of things. I like the way you put it across by refering to God's PR men.
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very interesting poe, it was very deep, nice job!
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You've got the talent, buddy! Keep that ink flowing! Keep it up, and down as well, for one has to lay down for love. -
lol....def a different style and flow then other poems on here.....i really enjoyed it....it made me smile...nice work
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very intersting piece, i love the idea behind it ,very witty , creative and well written ..well done Tomas
jamila -
Funny stuff
Lol, I liked this piece. A funny take on the story, and it made me laugh. Your flow was great. Good job!
~Nikki -
fun and delightful
You are a delightful writer filled with a cap of creativity... an enjoyable read, a stretch from some of the norm that I see posted. Fun and delightful is how I will render my "verdict", thanks for sharing with us! Tia -
Thanks dear. This is just a play on a lot of mythology and pedigogory. I love to beard the arrogant and puncture the pompus. Plus one of my recurring lines is:God save me from those who would save me. Love,Tom B.
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I love it!!!! inly you can make me laugh and be philosophical at the same time! You trully are gifted my dear man.
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i dont quite understand it...Hopefully one day ill b eduated enuff to grasp ur pen.
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lol you are a silly goose
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