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Spark in a Graveyard

 

Across the graveyard I have loitered,
behind the lavender’s full bloom
haunting dead loves in their graves,
wondering which dream would be my tomb

 

Can a body lose it’s touch
so far from it’s purpose?
Granite and dirt have dulled my senses
as I live to serve a maimed Bacchus

 

Drifting aimlessly with my heart in tow,
did I catch your song through my bars?
Faint, as the color on a faded rose,
I questioned myself, while hiding old scars

 

Your brightly painted wings
drew my attention away from my field of grey
Is it too much too hope, is it too much to feel?
I’d rather risk than be under the willow’s sway

 

Again I ask, “Do I dare disturb the universe”?
I have sat in lieu, with four broken Romeos
screaming, crying, and living to write
twisted tributes to insidious beaus

 

How I long to live among the living again
Could I trust you to take me away?
Or would I plant you in the ground too?
I grow tired, and so weary of modern foreplay

 

Shall I dawn Pandora’s garb,
and hand you my undoing,
ripped from my sleeve?
Or should I be a sad-eyed Portia, brewing?

 

Lavender in my hair and sandals on my feet,
I am staring out at you through the bars of my past
Can I trust myself to love?
Can I trust you not to laugh?

 

I shall wait and ponder your flight patterns
I shall guard my treasure in the dark
I have so much to give, if the soul is right
I hope you feel, my graveyard salvation, you are my spark

 

Of hope…

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Written September 1st, 2006

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  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    November 2, 2006
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    This is an incredibly beautiful and mournful write. The images are so wonderful and vivid. It flows off the tongue so well! Great writing. Very impressive.

    Jeannie


  • Tam
    September 3, 2006
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    HAUNTING

    My Goodness...this is very good.
    The image of the picture at the beginning is wonderful but your words create the true image I see and feel. Stunning write.
    This is one that will stay with me for a long while. I'll not soon forget your haunting poem.
    Blessings! Tammy

  • Mother Angst
    September 2, 2006
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    stylish

    wow! trust issues are the biggest items in a relationship. you have wrote about this subject with style!


  • eyesofanangel524
    September 2, 2006
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    awesome

    This is so incredibly written. Such a vibrant picture you paint...didnt need the one to greet the eye. Imagery is intense and pain apparent. Well done...very well done. Very talented without a doubt. Dawn

  • Mutterfly
    September 2, 2006
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    Brilliant

    Whew this is one of the best poems that I have read in a long time. It really blew me away and I had to read it several times. I am in total awe and you my dear are a truly talented and amazing poet. Your imagary is truly outstanding and the flow and meter just perfect. Love, hugs and blessings

  • sofargone
    September 2, 2006
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    great

    I like this poem but in some places seemed just a touch too wordy. Overall a wonderful read

  • Thedragonisgone
    September 2, 2006
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    THis captured and kept my attention from start to finish which is quite an accomplishment. the phrasing was lightly handled and had a fresh quality to it. I so love the cemetery. Graceful and elegant. I'm not just ssaying that. i've been rather grumpy with my critiques today. Thanks for featuring this.


  • grannyeri gold member
    September 2, 2006
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    Lovely reading poem - easy to read and presented very well - rhythm and rhyme right on - super penning here.

  • ocerus
    September 2, 2006
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    WOW!!! This is very, very good! I didn't see very many flaws here at all. For almost the entire poem, it was just one brilliant image after another brilliant turn of phrase after a beautifully-rhymed sentence, etc! Although I wouldn't say this poem is perfect or anything (but which one is, right?) so frequently here the effortless beauty is so amazing as to almost be - if in fact it is not - quite simply pure genius. You are very, very good! - oce


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    September 2, 2006
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    I shall wait and ponder your flight patterns
    I shall guard my treasure in the dark
    I have so much to give, if the soul is right
    I hope you feel, my graveyard salvation, you are my spark

    Of hope…

    very deep and very analytical bringing the interpretation of the muse of love..a great work indeed...


  • FaeryPixieFey
    September 2, 2006
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    I can't even find the words to praise your wonderful art work of a poem FaeryPixieFey.
    Edited on Sep 02 because 'spelling'.


  • sustaind
    September 2, 2006
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    simply awesome!
    very well writen
    and felt

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