Do you ever feel,
like you're fed up,
ready to give up on yourself.
Do you ever feel,
like you're losing a battle,
that whatever you do isn't good enough,
and you're ready to end this life..no more pain..no more strife.
Do you ever feel,
like you don't fit in,
like no one understands you,
like you're hurting is building up
up within you.
Well the world ain't a happy place,
despite what it may appear.
If you give up and let them win,
they wouldn't even care.
You can't allow them to destroy your life.
So fuck the world,
fuck their teachings,
and fuck what they have to say.
In this world the strong get stronger
and the weak bearly survive.
So when you hurt yourself,
what exactly are you intending to do.
Do you ever feel,
like you're ready to say goodbye,
and that you've reached the edge,
the edge of it all.
You think you're ready to go.
Just keep on walking, don't give in, don't jump off,
step back and walk away.
Author notes
Written September 1st, 2006
A contest entry
- Give Me Anything by Dlvvanzor.
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Its a powerful write.
Its imagery was simple but there was enough of it.
I think itsa a ittle too typical..
thanks for entering
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wow this is goo
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Wow, I love this poem. This is pretty deep and I am sure that many can relate to this. I love your advice here and hope that people will read and learn from this. Often times, we do tend to give up on ourselves. Sometimes it only takes something like this poem to bring someone out of it. Great work here with this and thanks for sharing it! Best of luck to you in the contest!
Jeremy0826 -
I only have one thing to say:
Yes
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Wow I love this poem. I especially like the fifth and sixth stanza. It really makes you think. Amazing job.
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Wow! I love it! Especially the fifth stanza! Incredible job!
Good luck in the contest,
-Dlvvanzor -
I love this poem, when i go through depression and think im not good enough i know i am NOT stupid enough to hurt myself and im too good for that so i really like this one!
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woww,amazing love it.it is so powerfull and i can see that you were angry when writing this poem.Yes i am fed up with this life.it is long,i usually don't like reading long poems but when started reading it i wanted to read more.it has passion,madness.i really like this poem,good job,I like the words you chose to wrote this poem,wonderfull.
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