He made this
world, made life as we
know it, made feelings,
human beings, made heaven
above and hell below,
made sun to shine and wind to blow.
God so powerful
made all these things,
created angels, gave them wings
gave his son to die for us,in his
love we are meant to trust.
He gave us things for us
to treasure, he gave us time
to be together,our time is precious
we must carefully measure, God simply couldn't
give us forever.
God made death,it comes
to us all, even the children
who who've barely breathed at all
god gave to us he can take it away
let us live a moment then
take us one day.
God is the master of all
you survey, we are simply
puppets in his play,
your life is mapped out
before you even know it
for God is the one who will
ever control it.
Author notes
please leave you comments, they do mean alot to me, thankyou
Written September 1st, 2006
A contest entry
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I like the content and message of this poem. You have an interesting style. I do believe you should use capital letters when writing though. If you don't, it looks amateur and lacks structure. Thank you for entering my contest.
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I meant informational not imformatory. I don't know why I said that. =P.
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I'm not sure if your tone is resentful or simply informatory. If it IS resentful I must point out that God also gave us choices to make. We have free will. He just knows what we're going to choose before we choose it. But we DO have that choice.
Punctuation and capitolization needs to be worked on but other than that it was good. =D. -
Wow. I'm going to bookmark this.
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I liked this poem, but it is a little like some poems I have read, previously, in the way it expresses its views. What was so unique about this poem, in my opinion, was the way it rhymed, but not at the end of every sentence, but sort of in the middle. If it wasn't meant to, then you do a wonderful job of making it flow that way. It did seem almost accidental, but that is good, where its not forced and the words seem meant to be there. I love the flow, even though the poem itself was something i've heard many times before. Any way, great job and hope you continue to write.
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