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۞Fey Child

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My baby woke me that night
with a strange timbre in her cry
As I gave her my breast I met a pair
of strange glittering fey eyes

No one has ever believed me,
they think I am insane
But there is some other creature
wearing my baby's name

No one understands why it is
that I mourn, why I grieve
I've tried to get someone to help me,
but I'm never believed

This baby is so self contained
she watches me so strange
I don't care what anyone says,
I am not deranged

At times when we are alone,
she taunts me with a glimpse
Of shining sapphire eyes,
pupils not round but an ellipse

Her limbs have grown
so elongated and so quickly
Not plump and sturdy,
but ethereal and spindly

With this baby in her place,
where is my own flesh and blood
Where have they taken her,
what, to her, has been done?

What strange sort of mother
nourishes my babe with her milk
How can I accept this
odd substitute of ethereal ilk

A deep instinctive wisdom in her
seems to acknowledge my belief
Ageless eyes show sympathy,
as if to comfort me in my grief

 

 

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Option A
Written September 1st, 2006

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  • midnight eyes
    July 5, 2007
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    Your a amazing writer! I love it.


  • BeautifulSecret
    March 4, 2007
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    Now this is great. It makes your skin crawl yet at the end you completely calm us down. Asbolutely good. I enjoyed reading this very much and you kept my heart searching with you the whole time. Very enjoyable read.


  • Jonathan ROBIN
    January 13, 2007

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    Changeling






    C hangeling wings from Pegasus may borrow
    H owever with the old soul wisdom there
    A nother story's told - of inner sorrow
    N ot evident to most who find fey fair,
    G rant golden trophy greeting rhyme tomorrow.
    E ternal tease below horizons where
    L ife's storybook's no fairy tale - we burrow
    I n lines below most radar screens to stare
    N ot at the heir apparent but Queen's cock crow
    G rown lonely as her own bio she'd share ?


  • Heartofacircle
    October 15, 2006
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    the thought of a baby being as you decribed just gives me these chills, such a well done piece, thanks for sharing and keep up the awesome poetry...

  • Meggh LotusMay
    September 10, 2006
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    I can't cryticise this, I can't, it's imposible. I looked up the word fey in my American dictionary and it has four meanings. I find this poem amusing and I don't know why. It's another fantastic poem, what gave you the inspiration for it? Anyway, have trouser ripping fun. Sorry, that's my new strange phrase.

  • DK akaLunaticSerene gold member
    September 2, 2006
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    Thanks Cheryl!
    I'm very honored to have recieved the gold for this!
    DK


  • rainyday woman silver member
    September 2, 2006
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    Thank you so much for entering my contest. You used a fantastic background for your piece, and you did a magnificent job with your piece. Good luck in this contest and in all you endeavor in life. Cheryl


  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    September 2, 2006
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    excellent~

    Mother's do have that maternal feeling do they not....
    This was very captivating from the start to the finish...
    Changeling indeed the thought going through my mind was Rosemarys Baby....
    Excellent imagery and you wrote this very well
    A first read of yours for me and I hope many more...
    Happy Labor Day Weekend & best of luck in the contest
    I love your Author Page
    Hugs
    Susan~~~

  • WolfCry
    September 1, 2006
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    An excellent write,I could reapeat what everybody said,but you already know its great,right?!


  • AngelicMistress gold member
    September 1, 2006
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    Dk:

    I have always admire and enjoyed the way you write.....

    This piece took me on a voyage to the twilight zone, or something similar.....

    The imagery, the words play and the description of everything was totally awesome..... I stuck to it from begining to end.....

    Truly and enjoyable read, thank you for sharing with me on this site.....

    Be blessed with love, light, and the gift of words, so that they may ease gently to you to share with us and the world surrounding you.....

    Your friend,
    AngelicMistress


  • PolkaDot
    September 1, 2006
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    Yeah I have to aggree with grannyeri, that does sound like something from the twilight zone! Good rhyme scheme! Awesome and crazy write


  • hoodoolover silver member
    September 1, 2006
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    Awesome job, very spooky stuff. I think that would drive me mad, if it happened to me, LOL, best of luck in the contest, this should do well!

  • DK akaLunaticSerene gold member
    September 1, 2006
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    Thanks! It's about a changeling...you were right on the money!
    DK


  • DK akaLunaticSerene gold member
    September 1, 2006
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    You nailed it! Is that a novel? Chris Woodings' Poison? Sounds fascinating! Thanks for the comment!
    DK


  • grannyeri gold member
    September 1, 2006
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    Sounds like something from the Twilight Zone, a tv show from years ago about alients, and supernatural unexplained phenomena. Scary...


  • Nitenovanavium
    September 1, 2006
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    great poem!!!

    woa... sounds like a changeling to me (read chris woodings' Poison) i loved the poem... its got an amazing fantasy aspect to it, along with being a generally well written and prsented poem im many ways including its imagery and rhyme scheme

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