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Set Free

I lay against this rock,
My gaze falling effortlessly to waters surface..
Searching the waves for a sailor
3000 miles away.

A merman rises,
Watching me as I try to sense
The love of my life.

He swims closer,
Sweet articulate words forming,
In an attempt to charm me.

I stare out at the sunset
And wonder if my poet will return.
Slowly doubts are overcome with fear
And desperation.
I cling to the merman,
And show him the love I feel for my sailor.

He is none the wiser,
Thinking my love for him
To be true.

But I cannot love another.

I cling desperately as the insecurities
Of my troubled mind
Overflow,
Drowning me effortlessly.

But as he starts to sink,
Taking me below the water’s edge,
I see sails.

The sight of my love’s ship,
Lifts my heart,
And allows me freedom from this man.

I swim full speed for the boat,
And am welcomed on board.

I broke the merman’s heart..
Left him for another man.
But I know for certain now..
My sailor is my one and only..

I cannot fall in love,
With anyone
But him.

Author notes

It's a pretty crap poem compared to the others.. Needs a lot of work. xxx
I want to thank my sailor, for setting me free from the merman. I love you Kevin. <3
Written September 1st, 2006

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  • Kevo MF Last
    September 1, 2006
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    -smile- were psychic. My poem falls into place with this one almost seamlesly. I happen to like it quite a bit. -kiss- I love you

    ~Your Sailor~