In a sea of a million faces, I blindly see only yours.
I belong in a home of desolation, I am to be called "wretched".
I dream of dreams, of dreams that are called nightmares.
To have a beating heart, is to have that aching need.
I am a crow, perched high up above.
Hungry from a desolating island.
Desperate for a hint of sanity.
Searching, screaming, always in silence.
The world below, like a desert storm.
Through these eyes, a worthless prey.
I long to fly higher, above all existence.
When I crash and burn, the maker shall know of my predicament.
Author notes
Written August 31st, 2006
A contest entry
- Almost anything goes as long as the rules are followed lol! by PoEtRyInMe.
300 points, ended September 17, 2006, 13 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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It Glows
I Love the first 2 lines very much...they speak of a desperation that burns through the words...."I am to be called wretched"..that is brilliant..love that...the following lines tell a story of despair yet of beauty...the last line is haunting in it's pathos...
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desperate for a hint of sanity - well that wish is flying out of the window where love is concerned, she has no mercy
spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...
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yes you're right. its supposed to be dark.
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thank you for commenting.
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thank you for your comment. glad you liked it.
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lol thanks looking forward to it. would be good to share what's so hard to digest though.
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stuck in the mud eh? never heard of it lol. but thanks for the comment.
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Nice write it flowed well. Kinda dark but im sure that is exactly what you were going for . Good job!
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Excellant /intriguing
Wow, I don't quite know what to say. I think it is very well written. I like it just the way it is. -
I found this very dynamic and unique.. It was well written with a great love and even a greater longing...Keep up the good work.
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Unique expression of verse here. I will be back to add a bit more as I need to digest it a bit furthere.
pen on
Shadows -
stuck in the mud...one of my favorite games, but i have to wonder if it has something psychological to it? You need friends/family to get you unstuck, then you have to run from the taggers (again). Something oddly repetitive and metaphorically relating to the real world. Your piece expresses the situation very well. I'm impressed by the emotion displayed her: it is unique...in a good way
Madison
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thanks. glad you found something you liked. have fun judging. you have great entries here.
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oh that is really sad. I liked the line... "I long to fly higher, above all existence" That should how badly you want to be happier, but you know you are happiest with that girl... or at least thats how I took it.... Anyway, thank you for the write best of luck to you in my contest.
Your host,
~Kate~
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