Love lost, soars upon dark wings.
Into despair, with foul things.
Though love be known to all save none,
This love lost, known only to one.
His heart bedeviled, his eyes beguiled,
his soul devoured by passions wild.
Now silent he sits upon his throne,
Of past regrets where cobwebs grown.
Had he but seen the future bleak,
his once proud heart, now frail and weak.
Away he'd sail, with no disgrace,
From loves accursed, eternal embrace
Author notes
Written August 25th, 2006
- Bis Lesbians Gays and Transgendered group list • next in list
A contest entry
- Break my heart and make me cry by God is my reality.
900 points, ended August 11, 2008, 79 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - What About Love? by GypsyEyes.
500 points, ended July 30, 2008, 132 entries
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wow you have a very interesting syntax and your rhyming compliments it perfectly, it's very nice.
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oooooo.....YaY..WoW..luv dat!!!!
I can feel the emotions in this..luvly rhyme..good flow.
Everything is wonderful.
Good luck in the contests(you deserve gold indeed)
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Thank you for dating your poems it really lets me get a time line of your emotions and your life in my head so to better understand your work. ...really a nice piece, beautifully written but not over-polished and still powerful.
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i liked it with the good flow of words and rhyme....
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I lke the tone of your heart and touch of your soul in the words here....I am thankful for your wonderful entry in my contest.....
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This is interesting. There isn't a ton of emotion in it, but it is still good. What I really liked was your choice of words and the descriptions. I loved the rhyme scheme, great job and good luck in the contest
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Thanks so much for the kind words
My emotional input usually comes across as hidden within the imagery but I assure you.there was ALOT of emotion put into this poem. It was a very difficult time in my life. Thanks for reading and commenting
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Amazing.
Wow, this is an amazing poem, I really liked how you've written it. You sure have a lot of talent, I wish my poetry was as good as yours. Where'd you get the idea for this poem? Thanks so much for entering this wonderful piece into my contest and good luck! I will be around to read and comment more on your poems so until then take care! And once again thank you!
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Thanks so much for the nice words and complimentsI've read some of your poetry and its awesome. U have a beautiful grasp on your subjects. I look forward to reading more of your stuff!
Peace,
Jim
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Soo full of love. Good work. But don't you feel the strain while reading this poem, such dark font colors on dark backgrounds. Make it readable.
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Well...Such a sad thing to read...has a longing in its tone.. one of longing to keep a hold and firm grasp on... and yet out of your reach.. Wow... I enjoyed it..
Edited on Aug 31 because ''.
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