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Coat Hanger Mystery

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Reaching her hand into the closet
To hang up her coat like she always did
Something grabbed her by the arm
Pulling her into the dark God forbid!

Wire hangers wrapped around her body
Suddenly the door slammed closed
Screaming she knew no one would hear her
To the darkness and terror she was imposed

She felt the hangers pierce and rip her skin
And the warmth of her blood flowing down
Her screams were cut off as she was gagged
And knocked violently through the floor to the ground

In the dark she heard squeaks and rustling sounds
And then fiery sharp pains everywhere
She tried uselessly to struggle free of the bonds
But she was too tightly bound in the wire snare

Things were crawling all over her and biting
Tearing off strips of clothing and raw skin
Squeezing her eyes closed and shaking her head
She was in shock due to the predicament she was in

She knew without seeing that they were inside her
Eating away at her organs and such
The pain was so excruciating that she fainted
Just as well since left of her life wasn't much

In the morning her boyfriend came over
And looked all over the house but in vain
Then he heard a muffled commotion
Coming from where he could not quite ascertain

Finally he went to the basement door
Opened it and fumbled around for the light
The noises got much louder then stopped
What he saw down there made him scream in fright

This was a mystery that was never solved
Speculation was that he was to blame
But how did he bend all those wire hangers
Not to mention how badly her body was maimed

Author notes

Written August 30th, 2006

Dear Christina, be careful when you hang up your coat!

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Comments

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  • thelovesongwriter
    May 27, 2007

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    this is so scary...and yes i will be careful when i hang my coat!. these entries get better and better! good luck!


  • Andi. gold member
    February 7, 2007

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    holy hell!
    this was definately DA BOMB! i loved the imagery, and how you feel like ur there, watching her blood drip down her body

    total awesomeness!!

    well done and good luck

    love coop


  • horrorfanatic
    November 12, 2006
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    this is weird not gonna lie i do like it though good luck in my contest


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    November 5, 2006
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    Thanks Vanessa for the comment and the HM, I appreciate it.


  • gothicchildren05
    November 2, 2006
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    so, the coat hangers killed her. umm....that's a little weird but than again, what isn't weird anymore. I can see you have a vivid and different imagination than others and sometimes...that's not a bad thing. this isn't that bad of a piece.....just weird. lol. you did a fine job and thank you for entering. good luck.

    -Vanessa-


  • DarkHunter
    September 2, 2006
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    wow

    Holy crap this is INCREDIBLE. Wow baby you have an awesome imagination. Yeah this was twisted and sick and GREAT!!!! You rock and good luck in the contest.


  • Gossamer Guile
    August 31, 2006
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    This is absolutely amazing! I love it! I would be honored if you would be in my contest following up Scare Me with Flair. I will send out IMs when I am ready, but you did fantastic!!! Great job, and thanks for entering!


  • Quill
    August 31, 2006
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    I was hooked on every line.


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    August 31, 2006
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    Thanks hun, I am glad you liked it. How are you doing? I have missed you!! Jeannie

  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    August 31, 2006
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    Thank you so much! I am glad you liked it, closets, coat hangers, crawlies, oh my!! Thanks for the great comment. I really appreciate it. Jeannie


  • tattooedxfairy
    August 31, 2006
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    I love it sweetie! Who other than you, brilliant as you are, would have thought to give life to a coat hanger? It flowed well and the story was devilishly good fun. Good work and good luck in the contest.


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    August 31, 2006
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    LOL thanks, yeah those wire ones are terribly scary! Thanks for the great comments and support. Jeannie


  • Grey Mouser
    August 31, 2006
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    shivers

    Oh so glad I don't have wire hangers here. That was just nasty. Well done and very scary. Very well done and best wishes in this creepy contest. Think I'll leave the light on tonight and stay awy from the closet.

    Mouser


  • Angels Delight
    August 31, 2006
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    Jeannie...

    You creeped me out completely but that was the point of the contest...You used something so everyday and innocent and turned it into a murderous tool...Scary as hell...

    I am glad I read it and good luck in the contest...

    Love you bunches
    Tes

  • ailiegirl
    August 31, 2006
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    Oooooh this is so creepy. I really enjoyed reading it although I won't be able to look at coat hangers in quite the same way again (which, I believe, was the point of this contest). Those innocent colorful wires contrast nicely with the stretched out wire picture at the bottom of the page. Well done, I liked the boyfriend twist as well. The "crawling all over" and "biting" made me think of scorpions, spiders, and other creepy crawlies, which is exactly the impression I should think we, the audience, are supposed to get. Excellent write, good luck in the contest!

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