Where should I wander?
Should I walk along the shore?
Should I walk the beaten path?
Does the mountain promise more?
Where should I wander?
Up the river, up the hills?
Up the mountain, through the forest?
Does the mountain promise thrills?
Where should I wander?
Toward the peaks I barely see?
Toward the sky so gray and angry?
Toward the heavens will I flee!
Walking slowly past the shoreline,
Past the forest, through the trees,
Past the meadow and the creek bed,
For the mountain holds the keys.
Walking careful now, it’s rocky.
The cliff face hovers far above.
The mist has turned into a pelting,
For the mountain showers love.
Author notes
Written August 30th, 2006
A contest entry
- Poet's Challenge #6 - Round 1 of 3 by DreamingSpirit.
300 points, ended September 15, 2006, 8 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - No work required for this contest. Prewrites only. by yoopea.
617 points, ended July 21, 2007, 74 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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FANTASTIC
Oh, girl....I had to come looking for part one and I'm glad I did!!! Fantastic writing!!! This is simply good poetry. Some of the best I've read at AP! Very well done.
I would love to see a link to part two from this write...so that the reader may continue the journey with you!
I can see why you captured the Silver!!!
You have a gift! Blessings! Tammy -
Congratulations on the Silver. Those trpophies are building up . Well done on this excellent write.
Jan -
My congratulation on your award Loved this the first time i read it , and it only gets better with another read Well done
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This is very interesting ~~ written very well. Enjoyed the decision making process. And the fact that the mountains hold the key. Thanks for sharing. Melody
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I loved the repetition of the given line in this piece. It added so much weight to all that followed. And what followed was a wonderful poem That was easy on the eye and mind.In fact a pleasure to read I wish you all the very best in this contest
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Awesome
I loved the feel of this poem, it flows beautifully in the same rhythm throughout and really shows the reader where you are.
Well Done! -
This is an exquisite poem, QuarryGirl. I love how at the beginning you hid little descriptions of the scene in questions. What a wonderful idea. Your rhyming was good, and your rhythm was as well. You had no grammar or spelling errors that I can see. This is an all around excellent piece. Great work! Best of luck and thanks for entering my contest.
DS -
The way you build up to the end is nice. This reminds me of where I spent vacation time this summer.
Thanks for this,
Chalice -
high
i maybe read this before,im not sure.but i like it so it doesnt bother me how much ive read it.it moves so smoothly and feels clean.nice imagery throughout.i cant complain.not at all. -
Very nice write..I guess the mountains win your presence.
Soulful Woman
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