"Hello."
it's me again
talking to myself
since I can't talk to my friends
they don't understand me
they think I overreact
but if it's how I feel
isn't it a fact?
"You're over emotional
stop being so serious"
I hate their words
I feel delirious
"I'm over emotional; well,sorry"
I didn't know it was a crime to care
I'm serious because life made me this way
they all say how brave I am
to have survived the things I have
but they don't understand
because they never lived my life
I hate the way they think I'm always depressed
when I'm as happy as I can possibly be
I wish they'd stop judging my life
and accept the inner me
just because I'm cautious
and care about how others feel
that's no reason to hurt me
and make me feel like shit
I am only a human
but I guess they'd never understand
that even when I laugh and smile
they always make me feel worthless and alone
Author notes
eh don't know what to say eh got int a tif with some friends nd wrote this eh I couldnt write on my own so I used this contest to inspire me
Written August 30th, 2006
A contest entry
- ~Dear Diary~ by -Ink Artist-.
300 points, ended September 4, 2006, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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I know how this is. it sucks. No one really understands me either... and I hate it. You did a nice job writing out your thoughts, though. I really like it. Keep up your good work!
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Love it.
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I like how you did some rhyming but it's not forced, that's something I struggle with, but I think this is a well written piece. One suggestion I have is you use words like sad and bad, maybe you could find some other words that aren't over used in poems like this. That's just my opinion though so you can listen to it or ignore it, it's your piece.
~Alix
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thanks for the comment I decided changing it up may not be so bad after all
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I really like this, I know how you feel...I'm sorry you feel that way too sometimes
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I understand what you are expressing, many people say I am an "emotional" person too, but how strong I am for all the trials and hardships I have survived. Be yourself, its all that you can be, people will judge you no matter what, do what makes you happy and the people that truly love you, will be happy for you and accept the you that you want to be Best Wishes
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wow well a honest critic would be this is more of a rant then a poem, but your rhym was very well done and it flowed great also why i dont see this as a artistic view it was very well done
Temple~
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very strong emotion and true friends should understand you maybe they just need time to except that and if the don't then the'yre not good friends at all. I'm here for tyouy and this was a very emotional and great piece, awesome job
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Well written, been there felt that. Stong emotion and a ferm since of truth shines through in this piece. Very well written, I like it.
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really good
i love this poem..coz its the samw wit me, and how some of my mates are like..they dnt even know the real me at all..
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"Your over emotional
stop being so serious"
If this is what your friends are saying, put it in quotation marks. I don't think you have the option of italicised text unless you're a gold member, but that'd work, too.
"Hello it's me again" -- you need a comma after "hello."
"they think I over react" -- "overreact."
"isn't it a fact" -- when you ask a rhetorical question, actually have a question mark, thanks. While we're on the topic, have some actual punctuation in a poem of this length, as my eyes are burning from reading and desperately trying to decipher it.
"I'm over emotional well sorry" -- great example of why you need punctuation. This is a run-on phrase, and it should read as the following: "I'm over emotional; well, sorry."
The rest was okay, but it was an abysmal poem. You're 22? If you're planning to pursue writing as a career... gods, don't. -
Marie, friends who don't understand you aren't friends, they are acquaintances. Friends know what makes your heart beat and makes your heart bleed. This is a fantastic statement of what you're feeling at this moment and journaling these feelings is the best way to not only understand others, but more importantly, to understand yourself. Wonderfully done!! Thanks for entering this piece and good luck!
~Lori~
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