Impurities of darkness have ravaged the soul,
tearing at each piece maliciously,
as years have cruelly taken over.
A life torn by so many unforgiven tragedies.
Stretching to the peak of destruction,
the mind twisted in hallucinating thoughts,
numbing every part that others clung too,
now out of reach - a shadow of her former self.
Solitude is her only comfort and confidant
in her dark underground world of desperation,
shedding black tears in a whirlpool of despair,
fading more into the blackness of an unknown void.
A different spirit looks deep into the mirror,
staring blankly at the girl within - the mirror's image,
no longer having the ability to fight to take control,
Living in another realm - at peace on the other side.
Author notes
What the mirror sees.
Written August 29th, 2006
A contest entry
- Dark and Depressing...Please enter by XHollowXEyesX.
700 points, ended April 6, 2007, 119 entries
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wow. I love this. it is so deep and meaningfull. the way you described the mirror's image, or how she feels was done with such great talent and use of language. it really flowed well keeping me reading. so sad yet truthfull.loved it.
thanks for entering and goodluck -
Beautifully written
Very neat Lis'. I especially liked the two sides of a mirror theme you have going here. I also enjoyed the individuality of each stanza. The precise thought you want to impart in each one is clearly seen. Excellent word choice, too. -
wonderful, excellent
Wow, your awesome. the form is beautiful, but in some area's hard to read. but the pain and passion you have put through it makes it flow, good luck in the contest. Your soul flows through this. -
Wonderful
Wow. That was deep. I love your descriptive imagery. It was very good.
Guin
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