questions unanswered,
tears unshed,
i cant believe shes gone,
i cant get out of bed.
i was only 2 months along,
and i could practically see her grow,
if only i could tell my baby now,
how much i loved her so.
late one night i awoke,
i knew something wasn't right,
i cried out in terror,
i will never forget that night.
my baby was gone.
never to be held in my arms,
would she'da had my eyes?
and her daddy's charms?
i was only 15,
and had so much to learn,
but i wanted my baby,
but the next page in life... i must turn.
i wanted to play with her tiny fingers,
and kiss those bitty toes,
i wanted to soothe away the tears,
and play with that little nose...
maybe it wasn't meant to be,
maybe it just wasn't right,
but i blow a kiss to the stars,
and wish my baby goodnight
Author notes
not sure exactly which option it fits under,
but its def. somewhere in the heartbreak
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aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaah, how touching and sad ` I do understand the write ~ when I found I was pregnant I already started dreaming of all the things I'd do with her ~ ..... I was blessed ~ she is still with me ~ I think it would be a crushing blow to had lost her ~
The flow of your write ~ moves beautifully ~ thanks so much for entering our contest ~ best of luck to you!!!
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This is so beautifully sad!
It's a terrible feeling to lose your
own child. I think you did a great
job expressing yourself in this write.
I hope that this isn't from a real
personal experience. If it is, I am
very sorry for your loss. Thanks a lot
for entering our contest and keep up
the wonderful work here! All the best
to you in this contest!
Jeremy0826 -
One never really gets over a loss such as this, but I do agree with BarefootSoul that our babies that were never born, do come back to us one day as another child, someway. Maybe, even through someone close to us; another family member or a close friend. I lost a child once also, and I swear that my son is the reincarnation of that child. It is very comforting to think that. Thank you for sharing this write - it is very deep and touching. Be strong for your child. What is meant to be will be.
Regards,
Karen -
Hi hun I just wanted to let you know that I was touched by your poem. My daughter recently told me that she was 3 months along and lost a baby. I had no idea as she was not in a relationship and the pregancy came from rape. Nonetheless, she wanted that baby and we were told she might not ever be able to have children due to her rare blood type. I've read that when the soul of your baby goes back to God he or she will come to you again in the life of another baby. This may or may not be true but it gives one hope. Love and blessings to you.
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This contest is for the People with Disabilities Group only. You are welcome to join the group. We would love to have you.
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They say that no soul enters this life until heaven is ready for it. Sometimes the things we lost comes back in another child. I have lost babies at this stage of the pregnancy too. A very poignant poem. -
Wow, so truly sad. Thanks for entering.
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yes it broke my heart
your words brought tears -
I am so sorry.....
i know how you feel i lost my baby also and which i have 3 poems about it in my poem list......
you really hit home with this one......
especially with the lines>
"i wanted to play with her tiny fingers,
and kiss those bitty toes,
i wanted to soothe away the tears,
and play with that little nose...
maybe it wasn't meant to be,
maybe it just wasn't right,
but i blow a kiss to the stars,
and wish my baby goodnight "
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thank you so much for entering such a wonderful piece into my contest!!!!!!
good luck and much love!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Wow! This was incredible and the pain was heartwrenching. I could feel it. It hit me like a brick. This was amazing and beautiful and I only wish you the best babe. good luck!
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oh wow this is amazing and so touching. But it's experiences like these that make you stronger and makes you move on in life!
gl on the contest!
::huggs&kisses::
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wow
OMG, that was so amazingly heart felt- It brought tears to my eyes........
WOW....thats all i can say, tragically beautiful.. xx -
SO HEART-WRENCHING!
I cannot imagine what it would be like losing a child who has not been born yet. The not knowing what they would have been like would be so agonizing. This is a tear jerker.
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This is very sad I feel your pain. There is nothing worst then losing a precious baby.All the unanswered questions and all the what if's. Life is hard to understand with simple everyday things then the worst thing that could happen does and it just shockes you forever.I think this poem is very heartfelt and shows so much love. Im so sorry for your loss. From one grieving mommy to the next
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this is a really sad piece...i swear i cried during this...great job
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this was a very sad poem I almost wanna cry, to lose a child you'd never met must be hard, you had a bond that is hard to break. thanks for entering
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aw thats really sad. that mustve been heartbreaking! this was such a great poem . thank you so much for entering this in my contest and good luck 8D
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I'm a real fan of grammer. And correct spelling.
But, I can understand what you went through then, and what you're going through.
Being so young, it makes it harder for us. But we mustn't forget that even if we were older, it would still pain us so much. I guess the best thing to do is make sure you weren't at fault then remember to tell yourself that each time you feel guilty/upset about it.
More importantly, don't be afraid to shed a few tears for your baby girl, because it's a huge loss, but she's still with you, if you know what I mean.
This is a great write, apart from the grammer and some spelling errors. I'm sorry I can't let you enter the contest though, it's only for the 12 people who got Runners Up.
Cheers,
Jai -
great poem. sorry about your loss. this is sad and touching. and makes peoples hearts go out to you. sorry agian. -Renea
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Even at such a young age it must have been hell to lose your baby. I know a parents fear is always to lose their children first. I wish you the very best carrying on as I know the grieving process in this situation is hard. I want to personally thank you for writing for my contest In Loving Memory (Release Your Emotions) for I know it couldn't have been an easy thing to do. You have been applauded for pouring out your emotions to me.
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Ted E -
Wonderful Work
I love this poem it is great. I am sorry you lost your baby or babies. But God wanted his little angel or angel's up in heaven with him. He is taking care of your baby or babies now. I love this poem it is great. Good job wonderful write. And remember God has a reason for everything.
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Awww this is such a heartfelt poem.
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