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Smooth As Silk

Smooth as silk against the palette, tongue rolls to slowly melt.

Texture lingers oh so soft, smooth, like sweetened cream.

Eyes now open, ready to take another piece,

But find myself in misery, dang, it was just a dream.

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This was better than the alternative.  Diabetic, so my choc intake is so very limited, and if you do too much of the sugar free...well you don't reaally want to know the consequences.
Written August 29th, 2006

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  • StormGoddess Greeters member
    August 29, 2006
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    Thanks for the comments, much appreciated.

    Storm

  • AliceinPoetryLand Moderators member
    August 29, 2006
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    Oh excellent write. I was there with you all the way and then wham! no choccie....just a dream Your imagery and metaphors were quite brilliant, especially those first 2 lines!!..Smooth as silk against thae palette, tongue rolls to slowly melt.....Texture linger os so soft, smooth,like sweeetened cream'
    Oh yum
    Thanks for entering and good luck in my contest
    Gaylene

  • StormGoddess Greeters member
    August 29, 2006
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    Yes it is very frustrating. I have been on shots for about 10years now, taking them sometimes 5 times a day. It literally changed everything. And of course, I had to be the wierdo, I have a rare form of diabetes, known as accelerated MODY. It is figured by the time I am 40 I will be a type 1 diabetic, probably starving for a beta cell transplant. So I try to live each day I have to the fullest and best of my ability. I don't want to miss anything life has to offer, so I keep on trucking, with prayers in heart.

    Thanks for the commesnt.
    Storm

  • Silky Origami
    August 29, 2006
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    My step-mom has diabetic, and it is so frustrating for her. Now they have her on shots, and she hates it. Not only this having to watch everything you eat, and then worry of pills to take all the time. I feel for you because I see what she goes through from a day-to-day basis, and it takes over your life. I wish you well storm. Pj's
    And as for your write well Bravo~~ I thought what a clever way to write about this.

  • StormGoddess Greeters member
    August 29, 2006
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    Thanks hun. Been one for about 17 years now,and it blows. And in those 17 years, no doctor has been able to find my trigger point, I am either wayyyyyy up there, or so damn low I should be in a coma. No happy mediums.

    Storm
    Edited on Aug 29, 1:21 p.m. because 'Speaking of lows...I cant type'.

  • Hekate gold member
    August 29, 2006
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    Awesome!

    awww I am sorry your diabetic sis...this was very good..best of luck to u in the contest

    Kari
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