Passion and flowers
Roses and wine
Early june showers
Embrace and entwine
Unfolding desires
A hug and a kiss
Sparking spring fires
Romantic bliss............
Rudolf
A contest entry
- For New and Trophy Lacking by Blooming Poet.
300 points, ended July 16, 2008, 61 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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This is really good. I like how it rhymes, but doesn't feel like it is too forced.
But I agree with Poetic Grace. Maybe you shouldn't have capitalized so many words.
Other than that, it's really good.
Good luck in the contest
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Interesting, having so much in caps might not be a good thing
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I removed the caps, don't know why I did that.
rudolf
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Good.
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WONDERFUL!!! The rhythm is flawless. This poem was simple sweet and firey gorgeous, The way you wrote it was just like this poem was wrapped in a romantic dream....lovely.
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just what I want for my friends today
love simpicity; behind which are ageless desires
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i loved the simplicity,wonderful. -eleno
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simple and to the point. well done!
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This poem is so easy to read and understand. Very few words but filled with romantic ideas! I enjoyed reading every line.
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It is a cute little ditty. But nothing more.
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The flow reads with absolute perfection and the rhyme is well done. It's sweet, light and airy. A very enjoyable read.
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good
I really like the duality of this poem, but I am confused at why there is so many capital letters? The idea of inside a fire is beautiful.
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Wow I LOVE IT!
Its so simple yet so complex of an idea. Who knew what a fire could hold! -
Something so simple and so sure. Nice. And yes, romantic!
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wow! This is and amazing simple write, a lot of times I'll read someones and it'll be written in the layout you have and nothing ties together (but who said poems have to have everything tied up??!) anyways, this was a wonderful write and I love how every line built up to the end. this was amazing!! -Pammers
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Wow this one was really good for the simplistic write. Said a great deal in a very short poem. I really enjoyed this. I could see each and everyone of these things. Thank you for sharing it.
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I loved this piece.... I was afraid when I first saw the title... But, I love what this contains... I love the flow... and the meaning... It's just perfect...
I love it. This is a beautiful piece...
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I love the imagery and figurative language shown in this piece. I think it illustrates alot of things, and I'm glad I read this piece. Thanks for sharing.
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wow i love this poem
I THINK ITS AMAZING!
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That feeling we have inside, that passion, that fire, we feel when we are in love, is unlike anything else we have ever known. Liked the flow and the brevity of these lines - romantic bliss indeed. Easy to read and understand what you write about here - good examples you give here.
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I liked the rythym presented in this poem. The words floated through me like gentle clouds across a warm blue sky. This short, sweet and to the point piece, paints a perfect picture of romance, and love. Two people, happiness abound, basking in each others undeniable love. A spring time love affair is what I see. Two lovers holding each other in thier arms, intertwined, and thier "unfolding desires" submerge themselves into waves of passion, and romance. Beautiful. Astounding choice of words. Loved the imagery, as well as your rythmyatic-flow.
Really enjoyed this one, and cant wait to read more of your work.
Keep your pen at the ready, just in case the spirit of words comes over you! Thank you again for sharing this piece with me.
Ashley [MISTAKE]
-SuicideBride-
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Talk about sweet beauty... this piece is drenched in it. This is absolutely breathtaking. Your words flow down the page in a river of loving admiration that is undeniable. Exquisite writing! Thank you for sharing your words with me and best wishes to you in all of your endeavors. Keep that quill dipped in ink and ever ready for use dear poet.
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This has such a wonderful flow, dances as you read...just dances, your rhyme is outstanding and I shall dance off to read another loved this one and my pleasure to read it! ~Tia
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Excellent
Awww.
This is soooooooo sweet.
I like this write.
Great job.
Keep up with the great work.
Keep on penning.
*S* Cynthia
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Awww.
That is sooooo sweet.
I felt like I was reading a REALLY good hallmark Valentine's Day card. I'd buy it.
Awesome rhyme, great skill. Bravo!
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I am no expert, as I am new too, but I really enjoyed this peice. Very nice
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This is short but quite good. The rhyme and flow are excellent. I can see this on a romantic greeting card. Do you have someone special to share it with?
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