Calm your mind my child; rest your fears.
The waves are gently washing from the sea.
There is no threat, so let your anguish fade.
And too the airs are still tonight, they feel
like whispers uttered briefly in the ear.
Calm your mind my child; rest your fears.
The waters, yea, may rise and sweep us far
into the dark, but now they swash at ease.
There is no threat, so let your anguish fade.
And yes the skies could shower flood or fire,
ending every gain, but now they're clear.
Calm your mind my child; rest your fears.
We do; we venture 'cross the fields of fate.
And though the worst could happen, let it be.
There is no threat, so let your anguish fade.
Forget the dreads that churn your thoughts to foam.
Think instead of swings and climbing trees.
Calm your mind my child; rest your fears.
There is no threat, so let your anguish fade.
Author notes
to learn more about the villanelle: allpoetry.com/Column/784856/all=1
Written August 17th, 2006
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where does foam come from!? my head has exploded...lol
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it alliterates with fade and fears. the a lines alliterate instead of rhyme in this villanelle.
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explain first line in quatrain...pretty please with cherries on top
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brooke said you would look like a rock star with eye liner on...lol...i asked if you needed eye shadow too to just be an ass and she said "hey! thats not a bad idea"....lol
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I get it!!!!!
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"fade"....does the same word have to be in that order like that in every poem?...and the words in the tercet are not actually rhyming but just have the same first letter sound...does that make any sense..lol?...we read your notes and our eyes crossed so we are going to try to figure it out this way...lol
we will have more questions in a moment
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I enjoyed this...
Poem to self.... I like... I didn't think of the actual disaster as reading this...I thought of a child in a closet afraid of the world they were placed on...as if the closet was their only haven....then some superior being soothing them in their fear and in their situation...to finally venture out and breathe a little ... There is something about this I can't put my finger on yet..but I'll come back... I enjoyed this...
KAY
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aashik: actually i used very colloquial language in this one, conversational. the line in question came out naturally in my mind, as if i were talking to child (one old enough to know about and understand big disasteres, but not mentally prepared to ponder them) directly myself.
nice to see some thoughts from you.
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Wow Erin this one really touched my heart. There is so much truth to this yet you wrote it in such a gentle calming manor, it could very well be used as good advice for adults as well as the beautiful lulaby you wrote for children. Missed you, Ill catch up with you soon.
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Hey Zahhar, I think this is a great write. Generally I'm used to the villanelle rhyming more, but you've managed this one quite astoundingly. I disagree with Aashik as far as the "yea" is concerned; I didn't find it forced at all.
The content of this piece makes me think a lot of 'the calm before the storm' sort of idea, especially the line "Forget the dreads that churn your thoughts to foam." It makes me wonder what this kid has to wake up to in the morning.
Great write
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The 'yea' in the 7th line appeared a bit forced in simply to fill up the meter and syllable count. Not very visual like most of your poems but calming all the same.
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