stitch me up now;
I have been healed of these
things,
these black little notions
crawling inside.
I have erased each trace
of dirt on my face,
now I glow,
white
and hollow.
you may have my things,
my clothes,
my rings-
I will wear grey,
bleak threads.
and the light will come
soon,
a reflection
of what is to come
to me-
heaven in all of its empty
infancy,
saints and angels;
compassion and peace.
wouldn't it be nice...
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Written August 28th, 2006
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This choked me. It brings back clinical memories with a surreal tone of purity.. between black and the norm.
Perfect words.
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Oh gosh yea, wouldn't it be nice.
I am so glad that I found your work, I love it
Lisa xx
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This one's stitched with bleed me verses, one that i certainly was taken so deep, speaks with great little strides, a brilliant piece, missed readin ya, smiles and hugs, Serene~
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it's such a treat to see your writings again
pure poetry
Peace Muddy -
I realize that my comments on your poetry always convey a sense of goofy, admiring awe. But your work always slays me. In an overwhelming way. I loved this (as usual).
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This is a powerful and well written poem that is filled with beautiful imagery.
stitch me up now;
I have been healed of these
things,
these black little notions
crawling inside.
Those few lines are so deep and so powerful. They do an excellent job of setting up the rest of the poem that is just as powerful. You have done an excellent job on this one. -
life is but an everlasting mystery with each twist and turn one they say is to focus and the answers will come i of course am and will be waithin for the answers
love the papa -
Genial!!
Totally powerful!! This tile is perfect for your poem so is the title.. The more i read it the more hypnotized i feel about it.. Heartache and sadness will not destroy the light to come.. A true soul friend is a reminder of a promise to final freedom with the concerns of this world. With peace that surpasses all understanding, never-ending love remains your friend forever.. This line: "and the light will come soon, a reflection of what is to come to me - heaven in all of its empty infancy," - The pearl in the oyster pledging for the treasure.. oufffffff!
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A passing from insignificant mundane concerns into the beatific humility of the after trancendence. This reader feels an odd imballance between embracing and embitterment in this piece, from the dakness that the narrator has been healed of, to the grey threads that he/she will wear here-after to the expression of 'white and hollow' glow. It's almost as though there is a perception of the goodness of the up away as being empty or lacking something intrinsic to the fulfillment of the narrator. Or perhaps this is all just my mood being washed into the words as I read them. My apologies for my morbidity. I thought this was well written and very thought provoking. In any event it dragged me in and begged me to go looking for reason in its rhythm ... I'd have said rhyme ... but it wasn't apropos.
Well done!
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really enjoyed this
deep write
beautiful write
keep up the great writting
Firequeen -
i like this one, I'm not sure what you felt when you wrote this but i like it alot.
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more please
I DIG IT!!!!!!that is one hell of a nice read.simple and sweet.beautiful in its brevity.very well written.nice and damp and dark.i love it.i love your choice of words and description.pretty damn perfect if anyones askin me. -
Very deep and insightful. I saw into your soul. Great job..
Soulful Woman -
"I have erased each trace
of dirt on my face,
now I glow,
white
and hollow."
Indeed, you are luminescent, Lea...Brilliant penning, Lady...I love the darkness & Light within these impeccable lines, my Friend...Such grandeur is spilled upon your pages, Lady...Brava...
Wanda
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