Painted warriors approach
While smiling maidens wait,biding their time
Mother moon beams one last time
as father sun rises
Sundance~
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Painted warriors approach
While smiling maidens wait...
Written April 16th, 2003
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Very beautiful priece. Although it be short, it speaks volumes.
great write.
Sam
yes...I sent that to my mom....it was very important for me to do so...thanks for your sweet comment
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can i come live in your poem.
great write. i am becoming a fan of your work. one of your poem, i forgot which one, was so beautiful it made me cry.
keep it coming, my friend!!!!!!!!
-queen of the damned -
Excellent write
Beautiful...just the title alone conjures up all kinds of images in my mind. Well done my friend. Freeways Mom -
excellent
I liked the shortness of it , and yet so much imagery in it....I actually sort of had a visual
Thx for reading my haiku and commenting
*kiss * Reenie -
this is really interesting good interesting, and i liked it a lot, very cool little image, and it's really short and sweet good job susan
I got a new one up, kinda proves that i'm not in a commenting mood tonight
kayla* -
Excellent! Well done!
I like this a lot! Always did like indians..well-built, no body hair, untamed, brave and strong! No wonder the maidens are smiling! LOL Enjoyed visualizing your poetic words, Sis!
< 3 Maureen -
Excellent!
I love the "image" of a Sundance. A beautiful piece, Susan. Very creative. Thank you for sharing..
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~Kathy -
Very spiritual, reminds me of the ritual itself.
There is a beat underlying it. I can see the ritual
inside my mind, and hear the chants, as a young warrior
goes on a spirit quest. Short but powerful.
Love it.
Blessings and Hugs, Daoine -
Short, but very very deep. Well, to me at least. Another great piece Susan.
With love,
Jey -
A nice soft and tender piece Susan....lovely and romantic.
Hugs,Sherry -
Awesome ,reflection pc., close eyes and take
So, uplifting and inspiring! Very beautiful, very visual and clear. A nice close your eyes pc. and reflect on. Escape from the current moment in time. The gray,dreary,no sun, sprinkles(but not enough to help drought). Just enough to make sand track inside. Send physical pain through roof. Palm Sunday 90 and 30 on Wed.????
Today, I wish I had ran, as fast as I could, when I met my nusband as an adult and not a little boy anymore. I can't move the land! He will never leave it. The extremes in weather here, just are slowly killing me. Will be on vacation until 5/1 no didn't forget AP. No pc's in Cancun's ocean. Write a bunch! the challenges of trying to catch up will be a trip and half! LOL.
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wonderful personification in this, Susan. Is this the one you weren't sure of? I don't think there is anything to be unsure of
Great poem
-Heather -
So beautiful and amazing Susan Breathtaking images
Love ya,
Karen
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It's purdy, that's al I got to say for it
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I feel the warmth of your words. Visualize it, the dance
of the sun. Renewal.
Maddie -
Susan this is really good.. quite a deep one from you.. hidden meanings here I think masks that can be reemoved..show many scars.
~GILL~xx -
Oh I love these short poems you probably know. Well done Susan. Hope this message finds you well.
Red -
Susan! OMG... I love this one! The imagery is wonderful, and it just makes me smile.
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breathtaking
Incredible...you never fail to take me on journeys with your words. I am very much drawn to this one, and into this one...I can see the warriors and maidens at dawn...the colors of sunrise playing over them...wow...heady stuff...hugs...Ro -
lovely read
nicely penned
~*~Blu~*~
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