You belong to me little one
More to me than just my son
You are my play thing, my toy
I love nothing more than the body of a little boy
Caressing your smooth young skin
While my body enters yours deep within
You try to get away, but I know you think this is fun
There is no point pretending you want to run
“Daddy stop” are the words you speak
So I shove something more in your mouth, quiet you have to keep
I hold onto your head as you suck me dry
I feel your tears running down my leg, as you begin to cry
I wipe away your tears as I kiss your lips
Pulling you toward me while holding your hips
My tongue caresses yours and I know you love this
Nothing turns Daddy on more than your tender kiss
“Daddy why do you do this to me each night”?
“Can’t you see I do not like it that is why I fight”?
“I DO THIS BECAUSE DADDY LIKES IT, I DON’T CARE ABOUT YOU”
I WANT YOU TO PLEASURE ME, AND THIS IS WHAT YOU WILL DO”
Author notes
2.)Write in the eyes of the assaulter raping the victum during the incident.
*** I am not an abuser, this poem is for contest reasons only, it is FICTIONAL ***
I work with children, and sadly have worked with children who have gone through this BUT have helped them through the pain and the darkness and allowed them the opportunity to see, that is it NOT their fault and that they have so much to offer this world.
May God bless the sufferers of abuse.
A contest entry
- Rape, Abuse, Assault by silencethequestion.
300 points, ended May 5, 2007, 29 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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this was a very sad write and reminded me alot of me..i was abused and it is a horrible thing to happen to anyone..anyways this was powerful and emotional keep writting your very talented
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wow. this is very sad, and very very well written. I'm so glad that you help children that go through this. no one, should go through this, thank you for helping them and thank you for entering. very good poem
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A very well written poem. I like it very much
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This was horrific, disgusting, inexcusable. I cant beleive the write, i know for fact this kind of stuff happens, it amazes me how well you captured the insight of the abuser. I find the subject disgusting by all means but your ability to write from another perspective amazes me. It was well written and full of vivid detail. Best of luck to you.
Vsutton -
YOu did a much better job here then I did dear, I had such difficulty with what I was able to manage, was so terribly hard to try to imagine what went through the mind of an abuser, It took me a couple days to just muster up the courage to tackle such a feat, and then when I did, well I could not do the details like you did, I had to approach it from more the angle of them making excuses after the fact and thier brashness of knowing if given the opportunity they will do it again. I have to commend you on this becuase I know just how difficult it had to be, I know becuase I know how hard mine was to do and it doesn't even come close to this one.
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Thank you for your comment. I understand that this would be hard to comment on and read, it was hard to write, taking into account i work with children, and know many of them go through this. It simply breaks my heart! Thank you however, for this challenge, i have never written anything from the abusers point of view.
Anyway, thank you again for the comment, and running this contest. Good luck with the judging.
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This piece is really difficult to comment on for several reasons…
That isn’t to say that it isn’t good, just difficult to comment on (and read). The content is fantastically intense and really pulls the reader in, trapping them and not letting go. It really pulls you into the situation, which is sort of why I found it hard to read and comment upon (just need to change the father to brother but we wont go into that).
You really have done a fantastic job of getting inside the abusers mind, clearly showing everything that takes place and sort of even explaining why while still maintaining the idea of there being no viable reason. the structure is good and the flow smooth, but the content's power realy takes over and makes the peice
Fantastic piece. Sorry that it took me so long to comment -
Thank you for reading my piece. Good luck with the contest, and the judging.
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that peice is intence... sorry... but will have to comment properally a little later... cant think what to say right now... just to let you know i've read it, will comment soon -
woah.. like...fuck..
i have a sudden urge to locate the nearest child abuse / molester..and kill them..
brb -
Thank you for your comment on my poem. I totally agree that the abusers should be tortured and KILLED. I work with children, and cant even think about the fact that some of these children are treated in such a manner, it makes me sick to my stomach, and i just want to take them home and protect them from such evil.
This poem was written for the contest and because it was a challenge for me, as i have written poems on abuse, but NEVER from this point of view.
And well done to your husband, if i was in his situation in jail i would have probably done the same thing. The bastard should have been killed, although then your husband would have probably not got out of jail, damn the law hey!
Well anyway thank you again for your comment, it was much appreciated, and i hope to return the favour soon.
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A very interesting poem which I found very deep, you got into the mind of an abuser well (I think, I don't know as I'm not an abuser/psychologist). Keep writing, this was a very dark, disturbing write. Good luck in the contest
All the best
Pozo
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Masterfully Written
There are no words to describe how sick and furious it makes me of what sadistic acts child abusers do to precious,precious children.They destroy a child for the rest of their lives.I've always said that we need to torture each and every one of them and then kill them.My husband was raped by his first cousin when he was 9 years old and his cousin was a grown man,his cousin was raping his own sister and my husband was trying to help her and instead got raped as well but when my husband became grown,he beat and beat his cousin for what he done to him.My husband hated and despised child molesters and once in jail,a child molester came in,he had raped his own little daughter and that night my husband and his friend took a broom handle and put hot sauce all over the end and shoved it into the child molester,ramming it up him time and time again and asked him how did it feel?!Then they beat him and beat him until the guy was almost dead,the guy was taken to the hospital and my husband had to spend more time in jail but he didnt care,he only cared of what that poor child went through because he to had been through it so my husband got 9 more months in jail but that precious little girl got some sort of justice though she will never know.The child molester wasnt took back to that jail because my husband told them,next time he would finish the job.
Anway,this is a brillant write and wonderful flow of words.You've made us look into the sadistic hearts of child molesters and what precious children suffer at the hands of a father that is suppose to love and protect them and its not just fathers,its mothers as well.Or someone you trusted,it doesnt have to be a family member.I say the victim should have the right to torture them just enough to keep them alive for months and then finish the job and put them 6 feet under!If this happened to one of my loved ones,you can bet thats what I would do!
Anyway,this is an EXCEPTIONAL write,an exceptional write looking directly at your write,with the wonderful flow of words,I read this write and looked at the "poet",also being outraged at this sadistic bastards and wish I could torture and kill every one of them myself.
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I don't know what to say...disgusting, horrific, demented...not the piece but the subject. The piece is written with fabulous flow and frightenly realistic imagery. The subject...I just don't fathom what makes a mind twist until it violates the innocence of a child. You've written what most can't even think. Amazing job!! Best of luck in the contest!! Take Care!!
~Lori~
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Thank you for your comment, i understand that it would be hard to decide wether to like this piece or hate it, turning away in disgust. This poem was written for the purpose on the contest, and ONLY for that purpose, I am not an abuser.
Thanks again for the comment.
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Thank you for your comment. I am sorry your son was abused. Yes i agree they are sick minded people that abuse. Thank you again for your comment, i hope to return the favour soon.
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I'm speechless. I don't know whether I like it or not, especially since its such a touchy subject. Speaking as one who has been on the receiving end of some such abuse (though not from a family member), I find it extremely hard to critique this piece. Your rhyming and flow was good, but as for the content - I don't quite know. I sincerely hope that this is just a poem, and you're not speaking from personal experience (ie, that you are the agressor). Otherwise, well written.
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This poem made me sad, it is a sick mind to abuse a child. It made me cry too. It reminded me of the man who abused my son. Sometimes I wonder what he thought, then again Do I want to know? No, I don't. Your poem is amazingly real life.
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