The calm is
almost eerie
as the silence
hangs in the air-
Quiet and looming
I walked into my home,
where was the staff,
the children at play, my dogs
to greet me
a stab of fear
tears into my heart.
NO
Quickly I run though
out the manor
and doubled my
fear by what I saw-
Struggle though out,
tattered and torn,
splatters of blood and
bits of gore-
I stopped almost
choking by
what I saw next,
what was left
of my youngest
child's dress-
Standing there
consumed by a pain
and rage so
great, I almost
went insane,
then I heard it
piercing out
in the dark-
A laughter, so deep
it reverberated
in my heart
it froze my very
being-
A second went
by and then a few more
and insanity's grip
moved me to the
door-
I couldn't stop
I willed myself
to try, my legs
wouldn't work,
I kept screaming why-
I was standing there
the next time
reality came back,
and before me stood
a man most gracefully
dressed,an air
of almost kinglyness he possessed-
"Why are you here,
what have you done?!"
I screamed at him
as the man turned smug-
" I have cleaned
house,so to speak
and we have only just begun."
The coldness in his voice
and genuine quality too
made me understand
what he was to do-
He looked at me
hard,with ice in his
eyes,and drew the
blade that hung at
his side-
Moving toward me
slight tilt to his lip
"I will have this
world,bit by bit,
soon all will know
me and tremble
in fear, and feed
me with plenty
when Loovaes
they hear-
Too late to move
I was caught
in the stare,
the demon had
me in ts grip
and the tip of Oblivion's
blade I kissed-
Author notes
this is another installment of my charachter develpoment, this is Loovaes, the main antagonist.
enjoy!!
In a list
A contest entry
- The Darkwrite Challenge (Season 6) by Ktulu Blackwolfe.
400 points, ended March 27, 22 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Oh I quite like this one! Sounds like he will build into an very dark yet interesting character. Excellent piece, thanks for entering and good luck
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You have painted some dark images enhancing the experience with heightened descriptive emotions...evil lurks right to the kissing of the blade.
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Now this is one piece that I am grateful is only brought forth by the imagination. This demon could truly bring about chaos to those who are unaware. Great job.
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Welcome to the challenge
I enjoyed the way you conveyed your dark thoughts here ... there was almost an underlying madness that seemed to ooze from your words so ... well done! -
wonderstruck & wunderstabbed
The ending is simply sublime.
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yeah this one is quiet the bad guy.... I drew some inspiration from another character in another story that is not mine..lol.. but oh so good none the less..
K
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I would be delighted to..
just send me the link when you have it up..
Krystal
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I would love it if you entered my follow-up contest, Perfect Poetry. I want to see all you've got, based on how amazing your poem was. Hope I'll see your work again!
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DK,
well I think you have already found the other one on him, but I have some that are about the other characters.. still woking through it..
thanks for the comment I'm glad you enjoyed it.. and also glad I gave you the shivers...
that's what I am going for,,,
Krystal
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Oh my holy stars, this is bone chilling! I MUST read any others written of this horrific fiend....what are the others called? tell me quick please!
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thank you so much hun,,
I am glad you liked it,, this character is going to be downright evillllll.......
Love you-
Krystal
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great
A wonderfull poem so dark and yet so powerfull, the flow and imagery was simply great, you have done a great job here, I am more than impressed. Love You John -
Absolutely love it! I'm glad you entered this one. Everything about it is amazing. The imagery, the language, the flow. Great!!! I don't think there could be a worse feeling than losing your children, or anyone you love, for that matter. And the way you ended it with "and the tip of Oblivion's blade I kissed-" is awesome. I am awed by the evilness of this character, and the calmness that he seems to ooze. Wow. Terrific job! Good luck in my contest!!!
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this is just great, i have to say i loved to read this poem, you have done an amazing job on this, i don't know why it is so hard for me to get back in to writting, writer block. i know why it is there but yea, i hope to see more of these and to you my friend i say keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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wow..this was so very dark..thanks for sharing it with us..I really enjoyed it..wow...awesome job sweety
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very cool
so well done..i'll have to go back and see the previous installments. seems like no one visits my book anymore...well..that's ok..my publisher wants more.....
great job...loved it loved it loved it!!!!!
all the best..........................Lionslove
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