“Oh please, no more cliché.”
“No more fairytale endings c’est-vous plei”
And yet, for you, I’m using this awful rhyme,
For anyone else, it would be a waste of time.
Even though I’m known to have often thought,
Rhymers should really be shot.
Just thought I’d tell you, although I’m sure that you know,
How your [sometimes harsh] criticism has helped me grow
Bashing society seems to be a favourite pastime,
Mocking repetitive foolish acts of a mindless mime,
We march along in this life and death brigade
And you sit back and watch with a cup of lemonade.
It’s been my privilege to know you, you see
Amazing as they get, everything I should probably aspire to be
So the message I hope you’ve got,
Enough of this rot.
Author notes
For an extremely talented poet, and a wonderful friend. I suggest you check out Nathan's work, allpoetry.com/poets/Colorsofwineandwar
Written August 27th, 2006
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Haha..I never, ever rhyme. Ever. But I thought it would be very appropiate for Nate..seeing as he LOVES it so much.
I dunno, Nathan is brilliant, so if you ever want some decent reading material, he's the poet for you! Sorry, thought I'd promote him a bit ehh. Thanks for commenting.
-Skye -
I loved the comment you left me, made so much sense. I loved it. Time to spread the love!! I adoed this poem. The first two lines really struck me. The rhyming in thsi was amazing! It worked incredibly well
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Ah, he just has high expectations, which is never a bad thing. And he gives a better critique than I have ever gotten from anyone else. You, a dunce? Pardon my disagreeing, but I highly doubt that.
Hehe, like he said, it was corny. But what the hey. Thank you for commenting.
-Skye -
ha, cute. he sounds like ahard guy to please. maybe i'll check his work out? though for some reason, i feel as if maybe i shouldn't...be the dunce that i am. ha.
anywho, nice write. it's a wonderful way to treat a friend. -
Bwaha! Ah, may I claim my crown as the corny queen? I had no idea how to go about writing a dedication without it, so I figured I might as well get a laugh out of it.
-Skye -
HAHAHA!! This is priceless! I love this so much. It's corny and makes a humerous read with the rhyme and words and stuff.
Thank you though in all seriousness for the Authors Comments.
Best regards,
-Nathan
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