Tonight our bodies entangle once again,
Nothing but intense sensations arise from within.
Her hand caresses my body as mine does hers,
Making short breathes and light enticing purrs.
I can feel her pulse become quicker,
like the flame of the candle above that flickers.
After a moment of teasing our lips finally meet,
Sending goosebumps from our head to our feet.
The passion between us becomes so strong,
Clothes come off for, each others body we long.
Off goes the shirts and then the pants,
Next our fingers do a little dance.
They move up and down each others body,
Itching to get a little more naughty.
Off goes the bra and down with our hands,
More intensive sensations become a demand.
The heat of the passion is at its height,
We both feel like we are high as a kite.
Slowing down, coming towards the end,
The candle light is now low and dim.
Embracing every last action,
We lay there with great satisfaction.
Our bodies still close, wrapped in each others arms,
Completely secure from any other harm.
Falling asleep...drifting away,
Smiles on our faces from that night's memory.
Author notes
Great times.
"Love me, Love my cat" 
Written August 27th, 2006
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by the way..
i like that title..
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WHOA!!
wow wow wow!!! i LOVED it!! that is sooo good! whoo! awesome, AMAZING write!!
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I enjoyed it, but I think you need to focus on either a more sexual or sensual tone. You mixed it up a little, rather than picking one, and as a result I didn't feel a single strong emotion from the piece.
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mmmmmmmmmmmm
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Nicely erotic, deeply sensuous. I enjoyed the use to the candle and the symbology you created with it. i like how you focused often on the showing of feeling and sensation and not just telling us. There is an inherent gentleness in this piece that fit nicely with the peacefulness I found at the end. Love, Tom B.
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Thankies for the feed back. I will fix em right away!
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Thank you for entering.
Passionate and flowing - that's good! Just a couple of suggestions:
in tangle - entangle
"Smiles on their faces from that night's memory."
Hmmm... "their"? You write this from a first person point of view, using "our" - so I would think it logical that you continue. I am not sure who else you might be referring to in this line. Just wondering...
Melanie
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