We were both fire and ice, blurring the line between extremes
Don't you see? We built the fire in our eyes, you and me
So we could look at this life that's made of nights & made of days,
made of dreams we try to chase,
made of useless cliche,
& things we have to change.
we were once crystal clear
.we.
.were.
.so.
[entirely] obvious
with our thoughts and with our hands
And I translated you into a romantic film where we were
just two lovers laying in an almost empty park on an
almost summer day.
.you.
.were.
.so.
[captivating]
I breathed you.
Now I bleed you.
And still we continue to play this game -
running around, speaking with no voices,
silently telling eachother how we feel.
Or how you think we feel;
and I know I'm really just here so you're not alone
All I ever wanted was to make you my own
And I'd have given you my heart, if you'd have sold me your soul,
I would have made you my all, if you'd have just made me whole
But now I'm left to watch it fall apart in front of me
Engulfed by insecurity,
holding back from holding on
Being strung along, cause I can't give up on you
[I'm not that strong]
&& Now I'm left to watch you walk away from me
Back into that sea
of city lights and drunken fights
Black eyes, white lies -
tight pants and polka dotted nights
Looking for another chance,
But we'll both be back for more.
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Just a few of my favorite lines here.
"All I ever wanted was to make you my own
And I'd have given you my heart, if you'd have sold me your soul,
I would have made you my all, if you'd have just made me whole
But now I'm left to watch it fall apart in front of me
Engulfed by insecurity,
holding back from holding on
Being strung along, cause I can't give up on you
[I'm not that strong]"
This is....its beyond amazing. Everytime I read it I fall in love with it more. Great job Becca. You're absolutley fabulous.
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very nice!love the word use and pain
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NOT SHIT AT ALL... infact incredibly bewtiful...
" And I translated you into a romantic film where we were
just two lovers laying in an almost empty park on an
almost summer day." - loverly
and
"Back into that sea
of city lights and drunken fights
Black eyes, white lies -
tight pants and polka dotted nights" - is great, paints a picture like...
lovesyou n hopes ure ok dollypips xxx -
Such a powerful piece Sweet Pea,you're the best at these type of poems I know.You have an understanding of words,the way you break them up is inspirational.I'd leave this one the way it is.Shug
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I really liked this, sis
I know you definitely touched some hearts with this one. ^_^
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THANKYOU!
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aww thankyou so much love<3
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I'm crying. I'm speechless. This is everything I've been trying to say and....so much more. I wish...I wish you could understand how much this means to me.
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Amazing
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I'm speechless so i'll just say I LOVE IT!!!!!!
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.you.
.were.
.so.
[captivating]
I breathed you.
Now I bleed you.
Those lines, captured me most
I also loved your last lines
<33
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Not shit
Tis great dollycake.. I think it's really good - nice little bit of rhyme at the beginning.. x
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