Eyes of emptiness
Looking for direction
Not ever realising
That it's not about completion.
Lives in shatters
No reason to go on
Just trying to get high
Not seeing it's a con.
Idle hands
Searching what to do
And the only thing is
To take your money from you.
Condemned souls
Only knowing about strife
Yet not how Jesus came
To offer eternal life.
Millions dying
Never hearing truth until
Someone decides to tell them
And if you don't, then who will?
Author notes
I was in Honduras for ten days and the thing that really got to me was the emptiness in their eyes. The kids live on the street really not knowing how they are going to get by another day. Spiritually lost. But, they are not just in Honduras, they are in our own cities, yet how many of us actually take the time to see them, and realise they need our help. I encourage you to open your eyes and look for people who even today, might need help because you never know, today might be their last.
Written August 27th, 2006
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Amazing
This is an excellent write.I loved it because it is simple yet speaks a million words.It talks about the conditions faced by children in every part of the world.This is the very reason I love your writing and am so proud to have you as my friend
God Bless You
Josh
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This is a brilliant poem for its structure and message. Well done dear poet.
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Hey Chelsea, this is such a neat poem. I was wondering whe you were going to post a nother poem
LOL!!!!!! Great job with this poem. I hope you learned, saw a lot while you were there. Love ya
Kimberly
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Some simple words, some very well chosen words, but overall and very well rounded poem. I liked the intense, emotional words you chose and the flow of your rhyming. Although one thing I should point out is that your rhyming is a little... cliche. This is something I've been really trying to work on lately (tried not to do cliche rhyming with my latest poem) is to use the same words over and over with rhyming... like life and strife are two words that everyone seems to use over and over. This makes them "cliche" when you use them to rhyme. Other examples are me and see, do and you, etc. I liked the con and on. Also, watch out for the types of rhymes like most of this is perfect rhyme, but completion and direction sort of rhyme, but it isn't perfect rhyme. Just thought you'd like to know.
Okay, but long story short, I liked the poem. It has a powerful message and definately shows how well you've improved in your poetry since you began writing. 
--Tim
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