there is a world beyond that shore
distant gazings will not keep me at bay
for I was not meant for this world of boundaries
Author notes
I want to travel. When I look at this painting by Salvador Dali I think to myself.. about what is beyond the woman.. I see the coastly shore in the background and the sky.. I long to be free as she does. To fly out that window and seek my fortune. I am meant for so much more than this world. Thanks for the inspiration.
Written August 27th, 2006
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A contest entry
- ~See it - Write it~ by Lavender Butterfly.
300 points, ended August 27, 2006, 12 entries
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A very expressive and sincere piece. Wonderfully penned. Thanks for sharing and good luck in my contest... x Butterfly.
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I love each word of your poem my dear, dont you dare change your creation. (well, thats my humble opinion
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it is right on the nose .... open to all interpretations of bounderies and the need to explore more, moving them
As i read the poem i get a sense of longing, fighting spirit and that one day you will fly out to other worlds
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Hmm, should I change it to that then??
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I have to agree. People should never be kept in one place for soooo long. Unless they did something horrible to get there. That should be punishment enough right? I have yet to go on any huge travels. Just going out of state about once a year. To a town that's only 2 hours away in another. But it's better than nothing.
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i loved your poem. i also want to travel and so that same longing came back to me in your poem. and your authors comments just added to it. hehe. good luck in the contest
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In your case Devotion, it might well say;
"For I am not to be constrained by Societies Boundaries of the Spirit"
for while you might be young chronologically, you are indeed an old and pretty damn fiesty spirit and I love you all the more for that.
JD
Edited on Aug 27, 6:03 p.m. because ''. -
Your poem expressed your thoughts very well. Very nicely done. Good luck in the contest!
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