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The satan of powders

One hit, you are addicted my friend
Euphoria, the high, oh my,
Think you can conquer the world
The days will pass you right by.

Don't give a damn bout nothin
Just gotta get high today,
Steal some money from my sisters bank
I hope she doesn't miss it, I pray.

I'm a good girl, good grades, good looking
As I look in the mirror to see,
I see sores and rotting teeth
This stuffs taking it's toll on me.

Last night I plucked out all my eyebrows
Only bloody arches above my eyes,
I must get off this meth merry-go-round
Before me and my friends all die.

Chrystal meth, the satan of powders
Has taken my normal life away,
GOD please step in and help me
Because I don't even know what to say.

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THIS IS A TRUE STORY.
Written August 26th, 2006 POETDONTKNOWIT

option #3
The second mate was ANDII

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  • Little-Buster gold member
    April 9

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    Great write.
    personally im not in to "the satan of powders" but i know a few who are :/

    -Buster


  • Little-Buster gold member
    April 9
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    Great write.
    personally im not in to "the satan of powders" but i know a few who are :/

    -Buster


  • Abandonedxx
    April 9
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    Awesome! I can't relate, but I know people who can.

    very touching.

  • graybeard
    April 9

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    Unfortunately true for too many these days. I have a grandson who's a devotee of this Satan of powders.


  • RX-Queen
    June 6, 2008

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    Great write, I can't say how much meth has affected my life and I have never used it. It is a completly destructive drug ruining your relationships, your body, your mind, taking even the best of poeple, I pray you find your way from this serious addiction.
    Thanx for entering and good luck!


  • DestiniesTwined
    February 20, 2008

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    This is a good poem. I'm sorry it's a true story. Please take care of yourself. Good luck in the contest.


  • Immortal Obscurity gold member
    February 11, 2008

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    I agree with Gaylene, in that meth is one of many substances that can turn a perfectly-normal person's life upside-down, and that is an image that you have done a good job of bringing to life. The only mistakes I saw was in line 12, 'stuffs' should be 'stuff is', and in line 17, 'Chrystal' should be 'Crystal', if referring to the drug. I'm sad to hear that you went through all this, but the best poems do come from the heart.

    The only complaint I'm going to make is that, while having your poem entered in a few different contests is usually not a problem for me, 40 at once is a little over-the-top. A lot of contest judges find poem-whoring to be very rude. I recommend you remove it from all the contests that are either over, or that you didn't place in, just so it doesn't take people six mice scrolls to get to the comment box.

    Best of luck in judging!

    Laura
    xxx


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    February 11, 2008

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    Yes it is certainly a very dark place to be when you are hooked on drugs.. I found your imagery and wording most upfront. A good piece aqbout the darker side of life that many fall into.
    All the best at judging
    Gaylene


  • CherryOnTop
    January 17, 2008
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    Thanks for entering and good luck in my contest.


  • Jai Guru Deva
    August 6, 2007

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    This is absolutely powerful.
    Beautifully written. You did an amazing job.

    Good job and good luck.
    Love, DxD


  • Girl With Guitar silver member
    July 17, 2007

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    Dude, you wouldn't want it in any more contests. Great poem for addiction and drug contests, but this isn't a drug contest. Sorry borry!!


  • Whoochi gold member
    July 3, 2007

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    Absolute honessty and truth poor out of it..It most definitely is Satans powder and will rob your soul..I wrote one similar called Devils Dust..It so destroys everything..It took me losing custody of my son, forging checks and living with cockroaches, thinking all that was just bad luck, bad karma., etc. NOT the drugs. HA! what a lie, cunning, baffling, insanity...Definitely powerful and poignant and raw, esp about what it does physically to one.....Well done, worthy of a trophy (or several) and good luck on next round


  • Andii
    June 27, 2007

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    wow this is amazing, Il oved this and it's soo sad because my cousin was really badly into meth and shit and It's just really hard to get off of and shit and ugh! sorry its a great poem best of luck

  • LaurenLightning--x
    June 24, 2007

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    This is amazing.
    You describe the whole addict thing well. Stealing money to get your next fix, doing stupid things without realising. Untill after.
    I love this. And the snatches of rhyme, are perfect.

    Thank you for entering and good luck!! :]


  • blondone
    June 20, 2007

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    A graet write the words send a powerful message and I can only hope and Pray for you to come out of active addiction its hard but so simple to do...Hit your knees and Pray God will pull you out of any addiction or depression...thank you for entering round one...

  • Raven Judge
    June 4, 2007

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    Heh.. enter many contests? lol In each contest with a general aspect there are bound to be a few pieces related to overcoming drug abuse. I am reminded, each time I read one, about my endless angst over how my nation (the US) treats illegal narcotics. The advent of AA in 1935, riding on the coattails of prohibition's demise, is understood to be a fantasic success, and equally understood to be practically impossible during the nation's war on alcohol. So prevelent today is addiction in our society that its struggles pervade almost every genre here on Allpoetry.

    This is to say that your piece, along with its companions, carries with it an automatic authority of sorts owing to its origins. Sadly, that authority is assuaged some by the abundance of speech and writing that all say, basically, the same thing: "my life is being / has been destroyed." I have come across few variants on this general theme.

    To achieve greatness in this area, then, the poet must transcend the struggle into the meta-sphere of addiction. To wit, he or she must find an overwhelming, global reality that causes the reader to look at drug abuse in a new way, and affects, then, a new, higher conciousness - if even in one individual.

    This may seem an impossible, or even vauge standard, but history has shown that it is certainly attainable. Poets who stuggled with absinth, for example, in the 18th century have written at length on the caustic effects of the 136 proof substance. Contemporarily speaking, cocaine in the 1980 and 90's has inspired more than one artist to muse poetically, and profoundly, on the drugs effects and consequences. Direct examples aren't necessary to suggest the point.

    I wish you luck on your continuing journey. Thank you for your entry.

    ~Das


  • XXBrunettexBarbieXX
    May 22, 2007

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    this was a great and i really enjoyed reading this...your words were strong, powerful and emotional and they flowed really well keep writting your talented and good luck in the contest

    ~Chrissy~


  • illegalfairy
    May 22, 2007

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    This was really good. It flowed smoothly for the most part. I really liked how you describe her as a good looking girl that now had sores and rotting teeth. I think you did well in describing how addicted you can get. Great job thank you for entering it into the contest. i enjoyed reading it.


  • Taintednightengale
    May 21, 2007

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    wow

    this si amasing. its strong and the scheme rolls off my tongue like silk. Some of its a tad bit choppy ryheme wise, but still and i like the way you show how much you want to forget this devil and i pray that you can for your sake and others. i canactually help you if you like, Im the crew leade rof my raze group and were big on people who wish to quiet. This was great. Powerfull and focefull.


  • XHollowXEyesX
    May 14, 2007

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    wow this is an amazing write..Ican really relate to what you have written and you have portrayed that way of life with great use of language and emotion. I
    especially love the lines 'Don't give a damn bout nothin
    Just gotta get high today,'

    and also 'I'm a good girl, good grades, good looking
    As I look in the mirror to see,
    I see sores and rotting teeth
    This stuffs taking it's toll on me.

    Last night I plucked out all my eyebrows
    Only bloody arches above my eyes,
    I must get off this meth merry-go-round
    Before me and my friends all die.'

    very powerful write.
    thanks for entering and goodlcuk

  • XXBrunettexBarbieXX
    May 11, 2007
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    this was a really great writ..i can really relate to this poem..your words were strong, powerful and emotional as well..keep writting your talented and good luck in the contest

    ~Chrissy~


  • Beautyfull-x-Angel
    May 8, 2007
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    amazing poem has ur friend gottin better?


  • vampireblood
    May 8, 2007

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    This was a really good write, and am sorry that this is a true story. It's hard to stop an addiction especially something like that. Thanks for entering and best of luck to you in my contest.


  • mythian
    May 7, 2007
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    hmmmm

    i think you may have gotten off track a little. but it was a good poem nontheless. good luck

  • LaurenLightning--x
    May 4, 2007
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    WoW..

    This is beautiful and powerful.
    It really leaves the reader speachless.

    Thank you for entering and Good Luck!! =]


  • bloved
    May 3, 2007

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    thanks for sharing

    wow this was very deep. I can relate too it b/c everyone has some addiction to something. it hits home for me because my uncle is addicted to crack and just lost $ 75, 000 from a settlement in a span of two weeks just on crack/cocaine alone. he has been in and out of rehab all his life. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.

    **Bloved**


  • badddgirl
    May 2, 2007

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    Thank you

    Think you can conquer the world
    The days will pass you right by.

    *I remember days that seemed only minutes long.

    Don't give a damn bout nothin
    Just gotta get high today,

    *I put meth in front of all that mattered, or should I say all that should have mattered. Than after the guilt set in I would of course cry and hurry and do another shot to ease my mind.

    I see sores and rotting teeth
    This stuffs taking it's toll on me.

    *I wont even go there. Better make dentist appointment soon for myself.

    I must get off this meth merry-go-round
    Before me and my friends all die.

    *I say I am scared of death, but then I would turn around and feed my vein chemicals that could have killed me upon shooting it.


    Chrystal meth, the satan of powders
    Has taken my normal life away,
    GOD please step in and help me
    Because I don't even know what to say.

    *Thanks for sharing this with me friend.


  • SarahEatsAirplane
    April 15, 2007

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    I really like this poem. It is so emotional, and even though I can't relate with the drug part, I know how you feel in a way to be addicted to something you can't really control. Good job and good luck in the contest


    .S.a.r.a.h.


  • Naridill gold member
    April 9, 2007

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    This is sad, and although, with Meth, I do not relate to this perticular experience, it does hit a powerful bit in my mind, I like it. I love the first verse, draws you in alot and also the ending is very powerful! And although this poem seems like a downer in some bits, it is a very well done affirmation!!

    Thanks and goodluck


  • jaunty pill gold member
    April 3, 2007

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    I am certain this is just not what I was/am looking for and therefore , Will have to remove it. I'm sure there is another contest ( like the group of contests above ) that might better suit this type of poem. I would also advise reading my guidelines a little more closely before entering a pre-write...It takes a lot to sway me with a piece that was already written. I think a fresh entry based more around my contest would have benefited.

    Take care ,
    James


  • ForgottenMemories
    March 22, 2007
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    very understandable poem. you say it is a true story.. I beleive you, it's just that it must be horrible to live like the way you described in your poem. sad story.. I feel your pain. thanks for entering and good luck xShadx


  • Faithless Angel
    March 3, 2007
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    wow, this is really hard hitting,
    thanks for entering =]


  • Dead Star--x
    March 2, 2007

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    least your realize this.. meth is the hardest drug to get off of and the easiest to relapse too because it makes you feel on top of the world... best of luck to you! thanx for entering & good luck!
    *Abused *


  • unchained fears
    February 12, 2007
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    great write, something many people can relate to
    Good Luck
    *uncahined*

  • torn-apart-angel
    February 11, 2007

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    very good writing and i like it but ya it doesnt really follow the topic but since i can understand it ill keep it in so ya inna way i can see how it relates but the topic wasnt achole and drus but like i said i see were ur comeing from and how its fits in thank you for entering and good luck
    best wishes to you,
    torn-apart-angel


  • gasolinequeen
    February 8, 2007

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    I liked it very much and I think it's something we can all relate to with various addictions... they seem like they're impossible to break. I love how well you depicted that sense of hopelessness in the beginning, and then the desire to fix it. Thanks for entering, and best of talent in the contest!


  • Hadji Murad
    February 4, 2007

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    Awwww, wowwww

    This is unfortunate and tragic and sad. It's so powerful and well written. You do a wonderful job and expressing the pain of drugs. There are so many poems on this site that glorify and condone drug use, and you really express the negative impact. Nicely done and thank you for entering and sharing. Best of luck!


  • Dlvvanzor
    February 2, 2007

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    Very powerful. This is a really great write. Good job, it's very meaningful.

    Good luck in the contest,
    -Dlvvanzor


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    February 2, 2007

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    My Dad is a drugs rehabilitation officer and I have heard many horrible tales about many different types of drugs... It puts you off definately, and sometimes we wish we didn't do them, or we wish we would've stopped sooner or whatnot. I hope you are not still addicted. If you managed to have a relatively painless withdrawal, then hats off to you as you did something very difficult indeed and I would not shun you for taking it, for you done something much braver... Stopped.


  • Georges silver member
    January 16, 2007
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    Applaud

    Powerful write about an addiction like sin.
    Georges.


  • locked door
    December 27, 2006
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    hope things work out for you this is a great write thanks for the entry


  • BabyxBadger
    December 26, 2006

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    Well done. A brillaint poem, well explained, emotional and really making a point. Brilliantly written poem, well done and I will be judging my contest soon. Thankyou for entering
    xxx


  • brokenpoet
    December 19, 2006
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    I really hope you are able to cease your addictions. You deserve better. It sounds like you have been and are continuing to be a good person. Good for you.

    This is a very good, entrancing poem that keeps the reader asking for more.



    Thanks for entering,



    Brokenpoet


  • CherylAnn
    December 7, 2006

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    Good Write

    This makes you think how can anyone ever get on the drug...I myself have never done drugs.But life isn't a bed of roses for everyoe either...It is sad how people get taken in my something that they think will make them happy,when all the while it is just a quick fix that doesn't last....Happiness comes from within...Good write,very eye opening,sad picture revealed...
    Good Luck in the Contest we share...
    God Bless and have a Blessed Day...


  • Emmjay
    December 5, 2006

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    Wonderful Personal Expression!

    You've done really well here, to get this down on paper. Tell me, did you/have you managed to get clean yet? I'm a meth survivor, amongst other things. I consider myself one of a lucky few. I'd love to know if you've gotten clean.
    As for your poem, I related strongly to much of it. The stealing, the mirror picking, the sores, the europhia...god...ahh! The hell....
    It does get better..
    Best wishes in the contest
    Sincerely -Emmjay


  • LipsxLikexMorphine
    November 2, 2006
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    id like you to go back and reread the contest rules... I need you to also post a fresh poem within 24 hours.. If you do not i will remove your poem from my contest.. If you do not log in within 24 hours your poem will still be removed, but if you enter it again with a fresh posted poem, i will still judge it in my final rounds... thanks
    *LipsxLikexMorphine*


  • Poetdontknowit
    September 30, 2006
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    THANX SO MUCH FOR YOUR COMMENT ON MY POEM! I TRULY APPRECIATE IT!


  • esroddo silver member
    September 29, 2006
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    very very good

    Wow so sad really, for meth is a killer and any one using it need to stop for there own sake. Good write thanks for enter and good luck.


  • sxyvxn3779
    August 30, 2006
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    a powerful write indeed! this drug has become an epidemic in my town... and many other towns. you have conveyed the destruction it causes well. great piece.


  • LdyBrknWing gold member
    August 28, 2006
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    Meth is one of the most insidious, and dangerous drugs around; and one that is many times overlooked, due to the emphaisis on cocaine, and other drugs. You did a wonderful job of portraying the reality of the devestation of the drug. It's truly something that, once begun, I believe, can only be stopped by God's power. Wonderful write, my friend!
    Paula

  • surreal realist
    August 27, 2006
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    very powerful!

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