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The Long Road

 

Granna, please wait up for me

why are you moving so fast?

Walk slow and hold my hand

 talk to me,

tell me things long past

 

 

 Hurry, child,

 let's find a spot

where we can sit,

 rest a spell

I have so much to say

the most wond'rous stories to tell

 

 

 Granna,I don't see anything

except the long road ahead

 Can't we just stop walking

 and sit upon the grass instead


The road is long,

my dear child there's

 much in life to behold

Patience is a virtue

there's so much time before you're old

 

 

 

Author notes

catz is my AP Granna and when I saw this picture..it just really jumped out and made me think of her. We decided to work on this together. Granna thanks for everything and for being a great romodel to me
This is free verse style.
Written August 26th, 2006

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  • Nighttime angel
    March 29, 2008

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    this is so beautiful with so much love weaved through out it. I absolutely love this poem so very much.. I could see this as I was watching it happen.. Outstanding poem.

    thank you for entering & good luck

    kat


  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    March 4, 2008

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    This is such a wonderful creation I love it. Good luck in my sissies contest hope you do well


  • FifthDove
    September 5, 2007

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    Nice write, the long road isn't so long once you are nearing the end of it though. Awesome

  • Warrior7
    September 4, 2007

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    Excellent poem, loved it because both you and catz wrote it and it was beautiful to read


  • AddictiveTRUTH
    September 3, 2007
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    Nice....

    thanks for sharing, this is very sensual dedication to catz, good job.
    Piff


  • catz Moderators member
    September 2, 2007

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    Hey, I remember this. It was fun writing it together. As I read it now, I think we should have written a couple more stanzas...what do you think?

    Good luck in the contest

    love and
    Granna


  • queen Moderators member
    August 29, 2007

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    I always wanted a grandma that would love me like this. Unconditionally Wonderful poem Thank you for entering and good luck in the contest


  • Candy6
    June 5, 2007
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    very good poem

  • Kari gold member
    September 24, 2006
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    Thanks hun... Good luck with judging!


  • RevHead
    September 24, 2006
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    This is awesome, I enjoyed reading it, i thought it was kool that there were two characters involved and that even though it didn't seem personal, in a way it was. Great job thanks for entering this in my contest, and good luck NMNM

  • Kari gold member
    August 27, 2006
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    Thank u hun I am glad u liked it


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    August 27, 2006
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    Ah Kari, this is very sweet and endearing. Very well written. I really like it. Best of luck in the contest. Jeannie

  • Kari gold member
    August 27, 2006
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    Thank u everyone for your kind comments...granna helped a lot with it


  • Lionslove silver member
    August 27, 2006
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    WHOOAAAA!!!!!

    heart touching and powerful, inside a well-constructed piece of art!!

    love ya..............................Lionslove


  • Firequeen
    August 27, 2006
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    Kari hun thats awesome you captured that beautifuly.
    I love the message.
    A great write.
    Truly enjoyed it.
    Keep up the great writting

    Firequeen

  • Kari gold member
    August 27, 2006
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    Thanks hun I am glad that you liked it


  • Ktulu Blackwolfe silver member
    August 27, 2006
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    You both have done an excellent job with this poem, I really liked the two different views expressed within. Good luck to both of you in the contest.

    *Ktulu Blackwolfe*

  • Kari gold member
    August 26, 2006
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    Hey Auntie Janet you always make me smile lol..thanks for your kind words


  • Iohagh
    August 26, 2006
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    Darlings

    From two sides view
    one old, another new
    the same questions asked
    listen to my task.

    Yet age and youth
    two sides have proof
    that what they seek
    is listening so meek.

    Oh how I love
    to hear things thereof
    to see grannies back
    even her words smack.

    Yes, I envy you
    anyone with memories who
    knows the sweet wait
    of this double gait.

    Smoosh

    Janet

  • Kari gold member
    August 26, 2006
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    Well thanks for your comment about it

  • Gummy Bear
    August 26, 2006
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    This is a very sweet poem, although, I don't feel like it flows for some reason when I read it aloud.

  • Kari gold member
    August 26, 2006
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    Thanks for your nice comment


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    August 26, 2006
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    this was lovely. the pair of you formed an awesome piece. The picture and the words just breathtaking. Thanks for sharing it. Best of luck and blessings to you both.
    Vsutton

  • Kari gold member
    August 26, 2006
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    Thank you for your kind words..I am glad u enjoyed it


  • nichtmich silver member
    August 26, 2006
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    Adorable

    A wonderful collaberation, and a valued addition to my contest I feel a few periods wouldn't hurt since you're using commas and other punctuation . I love the metaphor of the road as compared to life's journey and whether we are starting of finishing that road. Adorable and loving. Kudos to you both!


  • Reece Magic
    August 26, 2006
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    A

    This is a beautiful poem, very beautiful. And I love the picture. The picture goes perfect with the poem. It is well written, and I love the correspondence between the two. Greatly done.

  • Kari gold member
    August 26, 2006
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    Thanks hun for your kind comment


  • shroomgremlin
    August 26, 2006
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    A very well written piece that adequately describes the photo.Great job.

  • Kari gold member
    August 26, 2006
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    Thanks for your kind words


  • Wolfdog silver member
    August 26, 2006
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    Excellant/fun/intriguing

    Ah, but the days arrive when one realizes how short the road of life really is. A wonderful write. Very well done.

  • Kari gold member
    August 26, 2006
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    Thank you everyone for your kind words. They mean a lot!


  • Phoenyx Flames
    August 26, 2006
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    Simply wonderful

    You guys did very well on this. Its deep and meangingful, without being long-winded. I really enjoyed reading it, and it reminded me a bit of my grandma. She's one of the greatest people I've ever known. Great job and good luck in the contest!

    ~Nikki

  • mangledDawn
    August 26, 2006
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    im not even sure i need to tell you how great this is, because you probably already know. but incase you just dont get tired of hearing it, this was beautiful.


  • B Chandler
    August 26, 2006
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    this is very deep yet holds that overall simplicity of elegance. keep it up


  • Crusader9112001
    August 26, 2006
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    Truthful Inspiration

    Ah yes, through the simplicity, one of the truths of life is told! It was a very good peace. Best part of it is it's all so true! Well done!

  • Kari gold member
    August 26, 2006
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    Yeah I know I am trying new things..but granna helped me a LOT with this poem... thanks for your sweet words!

    Kari
    Love u !


  • Fairy Nutty Buddy silver member
    August 26, 2006
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    Wowie, girl! I think you have expanded yourself with this poem, it is lovely and so different from your other poems. I love it! MommaNut

  • Kari gold member
    August 26, 2006
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    Thank u so much for your comments I am glad you both liked it!


  • KirstenWar
    August 26, 2006
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    its wonderful, i liked everything in it, the picture is cute too


  • greyhaime
    August 26, 2006
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    This was wonderful, thank you for sending me the link,,
    you did a great job,,
    Krystal

  • Kari gold member
    August 26, 2006
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    Yeah...I cling towards needing family as well...thanks so much for your kind words


  • freespirit51
    August 26, 2006
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    Oh this is really a beautiful and touching poem. How I can imagine myself in her place. Both the granny and the grand daughter, as I miss my grandmother sa she passed many years ago. It is a beautiful photo as well. My kind of stuff too. I am very family oriented and like to read this sort of works.

  • Kari gold member
    August 26, 2006
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    thanks hun I am so glad u liked it!!


  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    August 26, 2006
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    Aww, you two did a wonderful job on this piece! It speaks volumes on life, youth and age. Bravo!!! Blessings, Gypsy

  • Kari gold member
    August 26, 2006
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    Your welcome hun..I am so very glad you liked it


  • Paladin Warrior
    August 26, 2006
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    As one that never had experience with grandparent, both grandfather dead before I was born, one grandmother was vary old and sick died when I was young, and the other didnt have much to to with our family, this is a masterwork, thanks wings...........Joe

  • Kari gold member
    August 26, 2006
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    Thank u everyone for your compliments!


  • nobodys looking
    August 26, 2006
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    Very good. I can't really explain why It's so good. I could go into some crap about imagery but the thought of this poem goes beyond that. The picture works very well with the poem. Great job.


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    August 26, 2006
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    This is a really sweet write.
    It fits the picture perfectly!
    Great work here and thanks for
    sharing this with me! I wish
    you the best of luck in the contest!
    Keep up the great work!


    Allen0826

  • Kari gold member
    August 26, 2006
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    Thank you hun I am so glad you liked it


  • Jadestone Doll
    August 26, 2006
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    This is very special and a good little message here. Great job to the both of you.

  • Kari gold member
    August 26, 2006
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    Thanks sis I am glad you liked it


  • StormGoddess Greeters member
    August 26, 2006
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    This is excellent. And such true words. You both did so very well on this. Hugs to both.

    Storm

  • Kari gold member
    August 26, 2006
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    Thank you everyone for your kind comments and sweet words!!


  • u took my user name
    August 26, 2006
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    great poem. it is very meaningful. and as "granna" says, looking for a seat, well, i guess that's part of the lesson, and how there is so much in life... th ejourney of life.

    I love the image too. works very well.


  • CBminstrel
    August 26, 2006
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    A nice poem :-) I liked the picture, an interesting one to use for this poem, and it sums it up well. I also liked the interchange between the older point of view and the child's point of view. It was a nice idea and a good subject matter...however, I felt that there could have been more substance to it. She says that she has many stories to tell...maybe telling some would work? As I'm sure she does. A nice poem :-)


  • djmadturk
    August 26, 2006
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    oh , this poem is fantastic . and picture completes it very well . what it says is clear and very thought-provoking .. it is a really masterpiece . good luck for you in the contest ..

  • confussed one 83
    August 26, 2006
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    this is really good

  • Kari gold member
    August 26, 2006
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    thanks hun for your comment


  • americanrebel
    August 26, 2006
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    Cool i like this really good

  • Kari gold member
    August 26, 2006
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    Thanks sweety I am glad u like it!


  • luckynsincere
    August 26, 2006
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    beautiful.. thank you so much for sharing this with all of us here... A wonderful collaboration if I may say so myself!!
    Mel

  • Kari gold member
    August 26, 2006
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    Thanks everyone for your comments

  • Kari gold member
    August 26, 2006
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    thanks huney I am so glad u liked it


  • Poetdontknowit
    August 26, 2006
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    SWEET!!!!!!!!

    AWESOME! I LOVED IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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  • XFaLLen-StarX
    August 26, 2006
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    i like i like
    the pic is gr8,get u in the mood of the poem which is..awesome!
    i love it
    good job sweets

    me
    xxx

  • Kari gold member
    August 26, 2006
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    Thank u so much for your sweet words


  • raggyann
    August 26, 2006
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    thew picture was great
    your words brouight it life
    wonderful poem

  • Kari gold member
    August 26, 2006
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    I am so very glad you enjoyed it


  • Loveandblessings2u gold member
    August 26, 2006
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    this is so very beautiful
    very touching
    a truly lovely read
    i really enjoyed this a lot.
    joyce

  • Kari gold member
    August 26, 2006
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    Thanks I am very glad you liked it

    Kari


  • SMario15
    August 26, 2006
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    This is a very nice poem that you had written

  • Kari gold member
    August 26, 2006
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    thanks sis yeah I can't believe today is Grannas birthday tomorrow is my brothers birthday and yesterday was someone elses birthday whew lol...
    I am so glad you liked it hun


  • Viva La Vie Boheme
    August 26, 2006
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    Ah this is so sweet!!! I wish I had a grandmother that I could be with, I always imagine how much fun it would be. You know the irritating stories of the past, and wise words... just like this one! This holds such a great message, and it's so sweet! I'll be back tomorrow to applaud it, ok?
    luv ya, take care Kari! say happy birthday to your bro from all of us!

  • Kari gold member
    August 26, 2006
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    Thanks for your comment hun I am glad u enjoyed it!


  • hoodoolover silver member
    August 26, 2006
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    Breathtakingly beautiful!!

  • Kari gold member
    August 26, 2006
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    Thanks mum I am glad u liked it Thank you to everyone for your wonderful comments.


  • AnnD Moderators member
    August 26, 2006
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    oh this is absolutely georgeos...... it really brought the image to life for me. and was so believeable.
    wonderful writing both of you.
    > <

  • Kari gold member
    August 26, 2006
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    Thanks for your kind comment sweety Yes she is awesome!! I am thankful she is in my path!

    Kari


  • Maatkara gold member
    August 26, 2006
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    Very nicely done, Kari & Dee!
    Yep, our catz is a wonderful lady - we all love her too

  • Kari gold member
    August 26, 2006
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    Thanks hun I am glad you liked it

  • Kari gold member
    August 26, 2006
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    thank u everyone for your kind words!! I am glad you both like it


  • Airborne Ed silver member
    August 26, 2006
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    This is a very special and such as pleasure to read. I loved the picture and the poem just fit so well with it. The poem possesses such a mystical power that it is easy for anyone to relate too on a very personal level. Great writting..


  • -darkprincess-
    August 26, 2006
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    really nice!!

    really nice poem!!! very realistic and passionate!!
    keep writing like this!! good luck in the contest!!
    kisses!!
    (* pau


  • wings of an angel
    August 26, 2006
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    Kari this is a beautiful poem you had penned here my dear niece, your rhythm and rhyme flowed beautifully throughout the entire poem, you discribed the poem beautifully good luck in the contest sounds golden to me

  • Kari gold member
    August 26, 2006
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    I am so glad u liked it. Thanks for your sweet comment!

    Kari


  • Gwenevere
    August 26, 2006
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    This is lovely.How i used to love listening to the stories of my Gran and also my Grandad.Life seemed so much more interesting then, Ros

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