I have reached into black heavens,
hanging on - not knowing why -
why am I here...
But, now I know.
I was given these arms
to wrap around you,
given lips to touch yours -
every part of me was made for part of you.
And, now I know.
I was alone because we had not met.
I was given life to leave it with you,
to be absorbed in you,
transformed into something greater.
I was gifted these words
and the rhythms within me
that allow me to sing on paper
so that I could leave them in your heart.
If I have found the pathway
into you,
I have found my reason,
and even though I want to live
forever in the gold of your embrace,
I have been the most I can ever be
being loved by you.
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Written August 26th, 2006
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Very well defined piece. This is about the closest description of love I've read. Very, very well done Scott. Trina
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I quite enjoyed this. Love poems can be tough, they so easily turn trite. However, this one is an unexpected little gem.
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"I was gifted these words
and the rhythms within me
that allow me to sing on paper
so that I could leave them in your heart."
Sighhh...Ahhh, Scott, what a lovely, loving poem this is, my Friend...Such tenderness, such devotion is revealed with every sigh upon this page, Scribe...& what sane woman wouldn't just swoon over hearing these words whispered to her??? If they didn't swoon, I'd say they oughta check 'em for a pulse...
As for your comment about leaving your life energy with her, I believe that, too; Love is the one thing we can take with us when we go & the only thing we may leave behind...Beautifully penned, Scott...I'd have to say that you & she are two of the luckiest Souls on earth...I'm quite sure you'd both agree...Be well, Scribe... Wanda
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Jaded - I intended it to be "leave" - the idea I am meaning to convey is that we leave behind our own life energy when we pass - so that I am leaving my life with her.
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Lovely romantic write straight from the heart.Well done with this touching piece
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I have said those words to the one that I love and it is the greatest thing in the world. To have that someone who gives you verse and sing to all that well hear. and for those that well not hear all they have to do is see her beauty and they well know your song.
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Note: 5th stanza leave should be live.
I really loved this poem. It was truly heartfelt. Nice job. -
Wow!... This was amazing!... Very beautifully written, I really enjoyed reading this!... You did an amazing job here... Thanks for sharing ♥
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A well written piece with emotion and sincerity.It takes the reader from the depths of the dark despair felt by the character hanging on within the blackness in the solitude of one feeling incomplete to the light of the completeness of the unity of two felt by the character.
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oh so soft and tender spoken these words are you have poured love all over them well written and the lines flow with ease just all around great writing....
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I feel i am being taught poetry right with this poem .. This is sooooo exquisitely written.. this line : "If I have found the pathway into you, I have found my reason, and even though I want to live forever in the gold of your embrace, I have been the most I can ever be being loved by you" - i think i can sleep tonite and just envision this last part. You can make a movie from this poem you know : ) Works of the heart are selected with the aims in mind.. and love is about breathing just a little more, a longing of the embrace. I love him so much. -
oh wow this is very beautiful. A lovely lovely poem.
I dont really know what else to say, it is just beautiful. A very real portrayal of emotions.
Wow.
Rah -
truly a very beautiful poem
what a outstanding job you have done on this write.
i must say that i honestly enjoyed this piece a lot.
thanks for sharing.
joyce
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That was stunning and you wrote it in such a way that it looks completely easy.. I happen to know it isn't so I have a great respect for these types of writes. I really don't know what else to say, it was awsome all the way through. I loved when you referred to being alone because you had not met her
that brought tears to my eyes! Bravo,
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Really sweet poem... I hope that one day I will have the love, confidence and joy that you have or that you show in this poem... Sometimes it's not that easy... But love is so strong, then again so is hate... But love is a beautiful thing... I wish for it, welcome it, but don't rush to get it.
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WOW this is beautiful. What love and devotion through every line. A wonderfully written work. Thanks so much for sharing
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My dearest Scott, you have brought tears to my eyes with your beautiful words. I love you completely. You are my reason.
Forever, always~~
Saffron
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