Walking alone
solace
Night
a light
a hope
a hue
of you
Filling, glowing, rising above!
Carried
in you
& you in me
Floating
New heights
WE SOAR
Together
Whisper
one word!
Four letters!
ADRENALINE!
Rushing
smiling
earth coming
Falling
Knowing you
I'll be caught
you never let me down
SPLAT!!
BROKEN.
(I GUESS THAT'S WHY THEY CALL IT FALLING!)
Author notes
My first piece like this be honest......
Written August 26th, 2006
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*clap* MORE!!! this was so awesome. i wanted it to be longer. i was so excited to see where it was going to end. magnificent...nothing less.
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for a first piece this was awesome...i love the way you used different formats to make your writing have an extra sense of feeling...very nice.
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Wow, this is pretty good for a first piece. I like the format very unique and the imagery was awesome.
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it's a good piece, is this the first poem you wrote?
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Not the first, but it was an older piece. This one was an experiment in word play.
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excellent
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good!
anything different is a good thing! good for you for trying something new, i think you enjoyed writing outside the box and i totally enjoyed reading it!
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I haven't read your work in, what seems to be forever! I personally like the form, it's as if the words fell from your lips and landed on the page precisley where they were ment to
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I guess so, eh? hehe.
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A nice write.
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So very cute and interesting. I like the way you put it into words... the rise and fall of love.
Kudos to you on the insight you showed through this expressive poem. -
Nice effort!
Interesting and different~~~ -
that was cool as. nice job
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Hmmm... interesting...
Hey man, wassup! -
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It was funny to me in a sick kind of way... I think that was a clever Idea but I don't think it worked very well... great job though on being creative. Keep that up I would love to see what kind of things you can do with that creativity -
The adrenaline of love is often the orgasm of lust, a drive to float in the night, high on flashing hues; the colors often fade, leaving many questions about the skin of pleasure softly clothing an essence of a being of purpose, of questions, of goals.
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Hmmmm..This a unique style...I love it! However this is some sad piece. Thank you for sharing and goodluck!
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umm not really the style is a bit hard on the eyes i never really like when people try to show dynamic by emphasizing words in some weird way especially when they over do it i mean if you write a good peom then you shouldnt have to do anything else but let people read it normally cause the words will speak for themselves
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