Dew Mingling
On a spider's web
Clutching
Winter's fatal wind
Author notes
As a photographer I have observed this in the Winter. I recall how much strength the web demonstrated while embracing the weight of the dew and the force of the wind. I wrote this Haiku in honor of this experience. Written April 15th, 2003
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How keen of an eye you possess... photogentically and poetically.
Exquisite!
I love the creativity of a spider's web. It makes for great art and even better haikus.
Much Love & Respect ♥
Renee
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What a splendid haiku. You've captured the strength of the spider's diligent crafting with these few words. It's certainly one of Nature's many wonders. Thanks for sharing.
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fantastic photo!
great haiku!
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great photo, beautiful poem!
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Beautiful!
Nicely done, i enjoyed it.
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Terrific haiku my freiend. I never thought of the strength of the web but it is true, they do stand up against the winds and rain...Thanks for sharing. Love the pic.
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hmmm
I've met a master of Deminished words condensed of thought. Very special, what a gift!
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Simple and Descriptive!
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I'm not sure that you can call this a haiku exactly but as a poem it is just wonderful. I can see the web and get the message you give.
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I see it and know its lessons. Bravo!
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beautiful!!
well written
i like the sound of it.the way you choose your wordsjust beautiful!
juliet -
I like the familiar imagery and the intensity you've created. I like the way you begin with a particular texture and energy and then shift abruptly to create a very dramatic effect. It also seems to be a very powerful metaphor. I don't know how to adjust the stars but it's definitely a 5!
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cool
Hello there. This is quite an interesting moment and I think it's a great one for a haiku.
Are you ok with the fact that you may have used a few too many words and so have lost a bit of evocative power? I mean, you have some here, but it could be even more compressed in the modern haiku way and with just the one break in the poem.
for example you could have something like this:
dew
on a spider's web
wind
But then again, you may not be interested in pure images. (I don't know!)
Have a lovely day,
BJ.
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Beautiful. So few words, which display such a strong image.
Beautiful, beautiful, beautiful.
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images anmd more images
this was great work
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This Poem Makes Me Cold
Burrrrrr
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The imagery was very nice. Winter can be a pita sometimes. I had to click this after I saw how much it was worth. (Unheard of for me). Thank you for the pleasant read.
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Very pretty. I love the eimplicity of it and the clear image you present. It makes me think of the fear of aging, and how we try to cling to our youth.
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Wonderful image penned!
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wonderful
Love the image here. There are many hollies near me that simply sparkle in the morning with web caught dew. Your poem reminds me of their beauty.
thanks,
Talia -
This is an excellent image, a great visual with movement. Very well done, I enjoyed this.
Thanks,
Myalia -
much like your Vietnam poem, it's very short and powerful. It's descriptions (though simple and short) are most wonderful. They bring a lot of imagery to mind.
swell write. -
This is beautiful.In Australia there is a lady who paints finaly on treated spider webs . This poem brout this to mind for me
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Intense imagery... i like this.
Nicely done,
~ Wendy -
Wow, this is really amazing! I love it
I can just picture it...wow...love
the imagery. Thank you for sharing and
God Bless you!
~sweetgurl -
great snapshot!
This is really good, very descriptive, very visual! But I thought you might like this structure better:
Dew Mingling
On a spider's web clutching
Winter's fatal wind
Whatever, I like it, keep writing, and good luck with your books. And thanx for your nice comment! -
Good piece, shows the beauty of nature, appreciate your comment....
Sherry:) -
A poem like this screams out true poetry! Well done!
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Dew in the winter. I don't see that much here. But I pictured this so vividly in my mind...and it brought a swirl of linked thoughts. Like how strong the spider's silk is. How it holds even in wind. How delicately it is crafted, how close it is woven..and how dew would look...clinging.
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Exquisite image! I absolutely love this.
Red -
Very nice. I can't do haikus AT ALL. (No I DO know how to count :P) I admire the discipline they take to do. Very nice. Val
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Nice
Very good write! I love how you got the needed affect by only using such short lines. While the idea of a spider web leads me to think of spiders- and then to cringe- I really do like this poem. Wonderful.
~Zeek -
huh most interesting poem. its short, but so is the spiderweb. great job and thanks for the comments.
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oh wow, I love this. It brings so much to my mind. I've a picture in my room of a spider's web with dew clinging to it with a sack of eggs, I forget where I took it, but it intrigued me the way the dew left the grass and plants and yet lingered on tha web, I snapped it and once developed it ended up hanging it in my den. As sort of a rememberance of longevity. To me the web looks so fragile and beautiful and yet it survives the elements and lingers a home dangerous to others and cozy to it's host procreations. sighs well..you probably didn't want to know all that LOL I really loved this write. Well done
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excellent
dew mingling creates such an ornate picture, the same freshness one feels on a wintery morn. Alive & rejuvinating, a very successful haiku. A splendid piece of writing. Cheers Lola. L -
Awesome imagery! It is beautiful; you've done a wonderful job. Hope to read more of your poems.
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Really good
This is good I like Haikus they are really nice thanks for comeing by my page are you kinda new here then I would also like to welcome you and I hope you really like it here I will come by to have a look at some more of your poems Robin...aka SH
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great imagery in this piece... the beautiful glistening of the dew... clinging to the spun silk... lovely.
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beautiful
i love when poets write about something so simple yet so beautiful--very well done -
thumbs up...and clear
verry verry intresting...i like the fact that it is 4 lines.....it is fun to mess around with structure...keep up th good work -
Beautiful write. Although the web looks weak its strength will clearly be shown. Mmm...This was really nice...I think everything you described is beautiful...All of nature is beautiful...Poetry makes it that much more pretty. Great write.
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Beautiful haiku!! better than mine!! I love it!!
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^Aria -
Pretty!
I love the flow, and this small poem has a big bite. I love the diction of "mingling" and "clutching". Just the image you chose to portray in general is very delicate and simple, much like haiku style. -
Is the spiders web connected to a bed of roses?
this was short and to the point.I can close my eyes an vision the dew clinging to the web.
Thanks for your wonderful comment on "Do You See Me?"
Yvonne:) -
Well Done
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A great job on such few words. But short is sweet is the way to be sometimes. ^_^ Tomiko
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I have thoroughly enjoyed your consistent use of powerful words throughout your work. You make good use of the paper on which you write; or, in this case, the screen on which you type. Very well spoken, very efficient. No bullsht to waste my time. Beautiful images and nothing else. Great writing here, keep it up. I can't wait to see you explore more subjects.
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Great job with the imagery on this one. You have quite a talent for saying a lot with few words. Nice job.
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great job!!!!!!
Hey there!!!
How are you doing today??
Oh, this is just truly beautiful..... So short, but so exquisite..... Wonderful imagery..... You did very well on this one!!!!! And thank you so much for the comment you left on "Where Are The Answers?".
I really look forward to reading more of yours!! And please take care!!!
Very Sincerely,
~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~always what if~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~
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nice read
well done
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well, great. nice imagery. even that small thing, you paid attention well enough.
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very nice.
to have something with such brevity say so much is a skill indeed.
the imagery... specifically the use of the word "mingling" was great. I'll make a point to come back and read others as I see you posted.
best regards and thanks for your earlier critique,
Kimmie -
I like it, very poetic way of putting it. Visual..beautiful. I like it a lot.
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You do an incredible job of describing something's raw beauty without going overboard. I envy you that ability, because I can never find enough words to describe beauty- and here you are describing it so simply and succinctly.
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Short, sweet and very very lovely.Few words yet it creates the most beautiful and perfect picture in my mind. Thank you........Nice Write!
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Excellent
Amazing imagry in just a few lines:) Great write and thankyou for commenting on my poems:) God Bless you!!!
~sweetgurl -
A few words with great impact and nice imagery. Well done
~Kathy -
A fine example of a difficult form...
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i love short, powerful little writings =)
it paints a beautiful picture in my mind, and therefor i judge it as effective. excellent work!
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loverly
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Excellent expression in such short lines. 'Fatal wind' is an image intense enough to chill to the bone.
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This was great!
Bravo!!! This was great! So few words that say so much! Check out my latest Haiku, "Wings, Dreams and Nuances," as I think you might enjoy it! Thank you for this, and for sharing your obvious talent with the rest of us poets! Kelly
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BRILLIANT
i LOVE something about winder and wind together. many poets use it. as do i. it has this chilling, yet sweet and fairy tale-like effect. i also like your screename or whatever the name is called on here. you definately are the epitome of a wordsmith. you have unmatched talent. Is this poem a formulated or free verse variety? iT Has the air of a Haiku or cinquain but not the same format. That makes me wonder... and I really like it, indeed. Keep writing! And return the favor and comment on me sometime! I'm new here and certainly need some exposure. -
Exquisite. Truly beautiful.
Glad to see you are writing again.
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excellent piece
i truly enjoyed
visit my page sometime
thanx 4 sharing
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Wonderful imagery. I see you are a short poem lover like myself. Less is more sometimes and this one is lovely.
Red -
i like
short
simple
but great description
well done
~*~Blu~*~
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