Chorus--
So you ask me for the truth
So I can tell you no lies
Not hide behind a cloak
Or mask under disguise
If you want the whole truth
Better be able to cope
Cos sometimes
The truths not what we hoped.
1.
I don't like lying its never been my thing
I try to make honesty out of everything
But sometimes in our lives
We find we need the lies
Better than the truth
(don't hurt like the truth)
If you want the truth you better beware
For the truth we rarely are prepared
To accept the darkness that may lie behind
When we tell a lie at least we are blind
Blind as the truth is to hard to bare
So lies are safer and most certainly fair.
Chorus--
So you ask me for the truth
So I can tell you no lies
Not hide behind a cloak
Or mask under disguise
If you want the whole truth
Better be able to cope
Cos sometimes
The truths not what we hoped.
2.
Sometimes lies are kind
With the truth that lies behind
Being far to complicated
Usually hurtful and hating
A kind lie is more suited
Than the truth to be inputted
if it hurts then do not say it
If it's nice go out and tell it
For a lie is a lie but the truth destroys
To those who hate lying this song may annoy
But try to see what I'm trying to say
It's not that lying is OK
But sometimes people feel that its better than fact
(Who needs fact)
When the heart bleeds all that's needed
Is beautiful lies to be heeded.
Chorus--
So you ask me for the truth
So I can tell you no lies
Not hide behind a cloak
Or mask under disguise
If you want the whole truth
Better be able to cope
Cos sometimes
The truths not what we hoped.
Chorus--
So you ask me for the truth
So I can tell you no lies
Not hide behind a cloak
Or mask under disguise
If you want the whole truth
Better be able to cope
Cos sometimes
The truths not what we hoped.
Spoken:
Sometimes man, you need to be honest to yourself
Truth ya'll is not always the best step
Jus go with the flow of the times and the rhymes
Remember a white lie is not a crime.
Author notes
Hip Hop kinda style... I know it's a little weird but hey, you know weird is good... lol.
x Empathic Rose x
Written August 23rd, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- HOW LYRICAL ARE YOU? by SecretMe15.
750 points, ended May 21, 2007, 10 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Honorable mention
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What did you think
Comments
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I agree with the others in that this should be set to music. I don't think reading it alone does it justice. Having said that, I really appreciate the theme and the idea that "a white lie is not a crime." That's definitely an important idea. Honesty isn't always the best policy right haha. The rhyming was excellent and the beat could definitely be felt. I enjoyed reading this. Good luck in the contest and thank you for entering
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Wow... just wow. Very good write. It's hard to write a song. Did you put it to music? I'd love to hear it sung cause I don't think reading it gives it that special thing.
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excellent. I like this one.
good luck
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This is really amazing. The chorus has a great meaning to it. Truth is great, but sometimes it only hurts us more in the end. This whole song flows very well, and all of it carries that message. Great, and good luck.
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Great write, didn't know you were a songwriter. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.
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whisper
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I like the concept of this a lot and the chorus very much, but in my opinion, the verses just didn't have as much affect on me as the chorus...I know it has something to do with the rhyming, it sounded a little forced. Sometimes it isn't too bad to force it, but this time it just didnt do justice to the song. But don't get me wrong, the whole idea was brilliant and I did like it a lot! Its just the rhymin that got to me...but other than that it was pretty good!
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Oops. I just realized I haven't been checking for something. Please go back and read everything, not just the points w/ "*" by them. I'd hate to have to DQ this piece.
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Thank you for entering the contest. I'll be back to look at it again when it comes to the final judging.
Good luck.
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Thanks for entering.
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I actually liked these lyrics. The words flowed very well, and I love the meaning. You know how to write a good song.
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I'm sorry, but I cannot accept this entry into my contest without knowing you read the rules; you can add it again to my contest, as long as I know you've read the rules.
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Judged
Okay, I have a compliment and a list of tiny, but unavoidable, critiques.
COMPLIMENT: I love the spin on this. I like the fact that you show how a lie is not always bad; that's what I had in mind for this quote.
CRITIQUES: Small list of critiques here:
1: I wasn't looking for slang. I know its not in my rules, but I frown on it.
2: Never rhyme the words "thing" and "everything." That's a rhyme you struggled to do, I think. Don't force it.
3: Verse 2, line six, 'to be' should be 'that's', otherwise it doesn't make very good sense.
4: Verse 2, line ten, Addressing the reader is risky in poetry or lyrics. If you do it too casually, then the seriousness of your subject is lost, but if it is done too formally, then all that's been done is complicating the poem. You simplified it too much; I wouldn't have addressed the readers/listeners at all.
5: Verse 2, last line. Work on the whole 'to be' grammatical error. It doesn't work here, either.
Anyways, sorry for nit-picking, but I am in AP English, so it bothers me about this... -
wow this would have to be one of the best i have read in the contest do far. I can really hear the beat and music to this. and the meaning is powerful, it reminds me of that saying 'what's better, a lie that draws a smile or the truth that draws a tear'
the whole sense of lying is wrong,truth will always come out,I suppose on the reasons behind it all.
great write.
thanks for entering
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yeah i can this with music,,,good luck in the contet
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Although most people may agree that the truth is always best songs and poetry aren't suppose to limit themselves to the best moral possibilities...they should be honest with humanity. Good job and luck.
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OK
I have to agree with Chief Callahan.
Indeed the truth hurts, but it's better to tell the truth than even whisper a lie.
Believe me, I have been there before, the more you encourage even the whitest lie, it trully will kick you up the backside three fold later on.
Nethertheless, it flowed great and it was well placed together.
Perhaps trying to re-word it might be the best way but still this is my opinion.
Keep on writing though you obviously have talent!
Take heed.
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two thumb sideways
I don't agree with what your poem is saying about lying. As much as it hurts to hear the truth, it hurts even more when you hear a lie and find out the truth later, usually by someone else or when that person who lied gets cornered. As for your poem, I think that you did a good job with it. I am interested in hearing how it would sound and how you would flow it. Keep up the good work and don't stop writing.
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