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Imperium

 




Imperium

 




This morning I contemplated
Writing an epic poem,
Probably heroic couplets
With a Latin title,
That would describe both
The English speaking world
And the decline and fall
Of the Roman Empire.

 

It would show the parallels
In the retrospective heroics
Of their creation,
The bloody wars with the Germans
And the consequent
Transfer of power
From the old centre
To the more prosperous new.

 

Underline the descent into decadence
And the rise of a subversive group
Of protesting religious fanatics
Whose martyrs simply
Increased their following.

 

I searched for a word for ‘ruler’
That would equally describe Nero
Who lit the fire that burned Rome
And the President of the Republic.
I looked for parallels among the emperors
For the Prime Minister’s
Grinning caricature of vacuous sincerity.
I pondered global warming
And the plunge into the dark ages.

 

Finally I gave up.
It was too obvious.



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Of course I didn't write it...

With help from Lisa
Written August 23rd, 2006

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  • Love of a Bullet
    May 14, 2007

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    Heh. What you wound up with was infinitely better. (Of course you DID write it, but that's ok, you found a grander to connection to make in the end.) I haven't really thought about this stuff for a while, you're right... that we are connected to our past not just in memory, but in deed, is at once accept and rejected truth. That this piece ends with a shrug is then, wonderfully appropriate. Thanks for the great promote.

    ~Das

    PS - Check out the Raven contest (20,000 points and cash) coming to Allpoetry this June.

  • Gertrude
    November 28, 2006

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    We need more clever poets like you to light the way. Show me the road and allow me to make the journey on my own.

    Forever Yours,
    Gertrude

  • ApathysEnemy
    November 28, 2006
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    almost confusing

    wow there were like five spots in this poem that im like i dont get it. Thank goodness for freshman world history. I love things that almost confuse me because they make my brain bigger. Anyway, nice job

  • Nicole Hanna
    November 28, 2006

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    Starts off so lofty and idealistic. Second poem as of late which mentioned Rome, and I can see why, in the context of this poem, as it definitely sets the scene for something grandiose. The second stanza seemed a little too "historical" for my tastes, and I had a hard time finding a correllation between that and anything associated with what's going on right here and now. The rest was a little preachy, but beautifully written, so I can't complain too much The end was particularly honest and in-your-face, and I felt did the poem justice.


  • Aeonna
    November 20, 2006

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    wonderful job, you did with this poem. it very sad as well, about politics. I love the colors, you use in the background. good write!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    white diamond


  • Image and Visions silver member
    August 30, 2006
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    good

    Phil, interesting on how your approach things from an intellectual standpoint. I think this was well done, factually as well a presentation and that you leave the reader to take thier opinion from what is not said. I think you make strong statements and though I don't agree with your supposition ( I take it your implying Pres Bush) I greatly enjoyed this write. image and Visions

  • BukGirl
    August 26, 2006
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    i commented on this when we were at that new place, but the comment seems to have disappeared. anyhow, it was something to the effect that you did, actually, write the poem, in abridged form. and something to the effect that i enjoyed the results.
    thank you for visiting my poems. i don't know how you found them or me, as i'm not exactly high on the visibility scale, but it's always fun to log in and have a comment or two.
    that lisa, she seems to get around.

  • zara
    August 26, 2006
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    Well, you did write it. Minus the couplets - that'll be in the next revisions, right?

    As to the subject, gaffer tape me please. I am Canadian, I must not speak. I dwell in the shadow of an elephant. (Were that it were so peaceful.)

    Enjoyed this immensely, the history and the irony.

    Z









  • Lute
    August 23, 2006
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    Oh! and never give up.

  • Lute
    August 23, 2006
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    Oh! 1453, The fall of Constanople. Moslem Turks.

  • Lute
    August 23, 2006
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    "a poem containing History" Apropo?


  • DawnBaby
    August 23, 2006
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    Excellent

    Excellent!


  • JohnWaynePalsy
    August 23, 2006
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    lololololololololololololol

    umm ok.i think i dont know what to say about this other than not my cup of gin.maybe youre just too smart for me.huh.is that what you think?you think youre better than me or something?ill show ya what for.c'mon put up your dukes!!!

  • pozo
    August 23, 2006
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    Lol, very funny poem Keep writing, this was a great poem describing a poem.
    All the best
    Pozo

  • gingerdave
    August 23, 2006
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    Ingenious.


  • chills gold member
    August 23, 2006
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    Wanted to say - I like and or love all you write... In spite of the purple and gold! It was quite apposite for the subject of course. And I really appreciate authenticity.


  • Rae the MoonShine
    August 23, 2006
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    Interesting... I like how you took your ideas about a poem and made them into the poem about the poem. (Hopefully that made sense.) In any event, you present a good point and have a nice ending. Very good job.


  • Mechanical Angel
    August 23, 2006
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    I've always wanted to write a poem like this! Wonderful job with it. I love to write poems though... about not knowing what to write about. They are more fun than anything else to me. The more I read it the more comical this poem is to me, you did a wonderful job I believe, and you deserve lots more applauds than what you've gotten! Loved it, nice job, and keep writing!

    Mech


  • chills gold member
    August 23, 2006
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    I'd just love to see you in your toga. Seriously, we have lost the plot. We are a button away from oblivion. May never get with you in Poetry Cafe..... see you in 'heaven'........ Nero, mmm, yes perhaps, I have you down as a bit of a Nero... But no more than I am myself....... Purple and Gold is kind of bad. Reminds me of liver and kidneys - not entirely sure why...Maybe it's the stir fried vulture... the whole kind of entrail thing...... I need some sky.


  • SaintCommon
    August 23, 2006
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    Yeah, I was thinking the same thing yesterday and boy, let me tell you, it just ait worth it some mornings... I enjoyed 'this' poem lots though. And I appreciate the contrasts between the US and Rome. In fact yesterday, I was gonna write this poem about...well, I won't bore you. Good Write!
    - The Common Saint

  • TaintedBloodChylde
    August 23, 2006
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    love the contrast between the US and Rome, its only by delving into our past can we truely reach out to face our future. im not sure whom originally said that line, but i feel its apt for your poem. great job. i dont agree with velvet and cvillelisa. i feel it said everything you MEANT for it to convey. Thank you for sharing your talent.


  • StarEyes
    August 23, 2006
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    This is fantastic! I love it! and i too see the trend in this one. And the colors you chose only add to this!!!!!!!!!

  • the pink reefer
    August 23, 2006
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    a great satirical piece. sadly ... i, too see the trend depicted in this poem. this is quite clever and witty. many thanx for sharing this.

  • Revwilliamfoos
    August 23, 2006
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    i loved this and it made me feel like the other empire that may crash soon the Holy Bush Empire great write keep doing well
    love the papa


  • August 23, 2006
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    this was clever and soooo well written. You are a clever and witty poet. I loved it.


  • cvillelisa
    August 23, 2006
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    We need a Satire cateogry. Political Satire. You know I told you that someone told me write before I read this that the US is becoming a Rome-like Republic. And this person is very wise -- as you are. Unfortunately, I'd call it also, Sad.

    Love the Royal Purple that you've used.

    Lisa

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