Sausages cooking on the barbecue
Steak, eggs and bacon too
Sizzling now they're almost done
Serve it up for everyone
Side of salad on your plate
Sip some coke while you wait
Save some space for a second round
Sit with me here on the ground
Silly kids running everywhere
Screaming loud, now parents stare
Silence now the partie's done
Say good-bye to everyone
Seat belt on it's time to go
Sitting in the front with Beau
Sleepy now I close my eyes
Sun is up it's time to rise!
Author notes
I have chosen option 1 for the contest...
Written August 23rd, 2006
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this is such a cool poem! i loved it. beautiful imagery created
luv ya girlie,
ashley -
Oh wow! I loved it! Although it made me very hungry... lol
hehe Great job on this sis! Keep it up!! 
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than-you guys for your lovely comments i really appriciate it thanxs again LUV PAIGE
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This was a great poem, very happy. I’m vegetarian so it takes a well thought out barbecue to make me hungry, but I thought the atmosphere here sounded lovely. This was a great narrative poem with good use of rhyme. Keep writing, this was a great poem about a barbecue. ‘Partie’s’ should be ‘party’s’
All the best
Pozo
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the party's done ...
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this is a mouth-watering, cute and slurpy work! i kept wishing those food were right in front of my eyes now..they'd be gone in no time..good write!
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adorable!
really something
i needed to read 6:30
in the morn,you started my
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Tank-you guys so much for your lovely comments i really appriciate it thanx.....
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Tasty
Very great Paige made me hungry, lick my lips and druwell.. MMmmmmmm yummy. great work and hope i can talk 2 ya soon.
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Paige
what a great set of rhymes in this poem. It evoked so many memories of barbeques from my past. Your images you have painted were outstanding, and of course your real tone language set this apart from so many poet that would rather(wrongly) use that flowery poetic language that they don't use everyday. Great job and good luck. -
thanx and this is a really cool poem!! good luck in the contest too. =)
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Good poem,Yes you managed to start every line with an s and it also rhymed,rhyming is my choice,I enjoyed this poem.
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A very enjoyable read and very well done to follow the contest option and start each line with the letter S. Sounds like many a barbeque or picnic I have been too, a great reminder of times with family and friends when life seemed so much simpler. Thanks for the memories of more pleasant times and best wishes for the contest.
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Glad to see you back Princess and what a jolly poem it is too..I could see all the action and smell all that delicious food...a lovey day out..thank you for taking me with you
Good luck sweetie.
Love and hugs
Nanna Barbara
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This was very cheery lol. Great job. Now i want food! lol. good luck in the contest.
Isabel
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yum =D
wonderful job paige! this sounds so yummy...I just got done with breakfast, with lots and lots of bacon bits on my eggs
this made the taste in my mouth even better! good luck in the contest, I hope you get a trophy XD
~ lise
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where is the chow?
That was a truly enjoyful poem and quite franky it made me hungry as all heck! Honestly! Yummmmmmmmmmmmmm
JD -
This is great paige. I can never think of something to write with every sentence beginning with the same letter or the first letters of each sentence spelling something out. Unlike other people I know here the muse just never comes to me.
But I'm proud of people who can such as you. You've written this very nicely and what a yummy poem at that.
Well done.
Brian -
Wow you did a great job getting every line to start with S and the flow and rhyme is perfect !! This poem makes me feel hungry
lol sizzling sausages sound yummy ! lots of luck in the contest
♥
ellie
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Yay! Paige, well done! You managed to start every line with the letter "s" and you rhymed! Good~luck in the contest....
Love mum
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