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Terminal Heartache

She wears fake smiles with false sincerity,
She ties back her hair with sweet immunity,
closes her eyes on dream of destiny-
she knows, she knows ((Beware of dancing pants))
It's death, it's death ((Beware of dancing pants))

She faces life with dear impudency,
She'll be there in the final jubilee,
where I am just another absentee-
not there- not there ((Beware of dancing pants))
It's death, its' death ((Beware of dancing pants))

She knows- that- only time can tell,
that- this- may as well be hell,
She knows, she knows, she'll die, she'll die
so why- why try- why try- why.... try...

She reeks of mere mediocrity,
She swims in dreams of still simplicity,
laughs at the world and it's idiotsy,
Unreal, unreal ((Beware of dancing pants))
It's death, it's death ((Beware of dancing pants))

She holds her heart above the world's debris,
She sips strong love-brewed in jasmine tea,
singing of ancient long lost potpourri,
True love, true love ((Beware of dancing pants))
It's death, it's death ((Beware of dancing pants))

She knows- that- only time can tell,
that- this- may as well be hell,
She knows, she knows, she'll die, she'll die
so why- why try- why try- why.... try...

[music fades away] whispered: Because she loves him...

Author notes

Okay, I have issues. I know how this song will go... I need somethign to replace the pants line though... meh.

And I've only ever written two songs before, so I'm not very good...
Written August 10th, 2006

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  • Perhaps
    September 30, 2006
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    Okay, I really dont know either. This was one of those rare poems that float into your head and get stuck there, and it had a tune in my head, and that dancing pants line was in there and I can't think of anythign to replace it!


  • Anatiferous
    September 30, 2006
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    Wow... that was so pretty! And the title is INGENIOUS! Very clever. But...what's with the dancing pants? Not that they're bad or anything, it's actually quite funny, but...I am just questioning the origins...lol.