envious inadequacies
(eloquently professed
turgid verses of aversion)
susceptible to demons
hiding in lingering shadows;
competing for sanctity;
slowly killing confidence.
surrounded, but always alone.
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-shrug- it's not done or good but i actually wrote something for the first time in awhile so whatever.
Written August 22nd, 2006
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hi,
you wrote this almost two years ago and then ziiiiiiiiiiiip!
not one chorus more...where'd
ya go?
Competing for confidence and sanctity slow?
you need to write more
thats what I know
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i think this is great. you took one of your own and improved it, showing signs of advancement of your mind, as well as your talent. you can do alot with expansion. just dont do it to all of your pieces. some poetry is great the way it is. anyway, i understood it fine, and i do agree with you. great job.
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i love the use of subtlety in this, very mysterious, dances upon different things but doesnt settle anywhere, i think its great,
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It's really good. I really like it. Awesome job!!!!
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Well, thank you. I don't generally use "big words" and this actually used to have a lot more "little words" in it, but I don't like my poetry when it has long lines so I took out all the unnecessary words, leaving it with a lot more "big words" than I like to use, but... Y'know. Thank you for your comment!
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I love this. It reminds me fondly of stuff I've written. Although all the big words might be confusing to most, I did enjoy reading it. I think that it should also be a little bit longer... you know, carrying on with a good thing.
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