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Under the Southern Moon

Missing image

I saw her

in the whisper of trees

when the

cicadas

sang

sweet melody

into the humid

air.


I was embraced

by the memory.


Laughter


lit up a room.


Brazen girl,

entered their mist
large as life

they stopped,

found

themselves staring.


Yes,

they wanted to know her.



They wanted her secrets .


She drew you

into her web,

you found

yourself wanting

to spin onto her;

dreams of into her

while you danced,

sweat
lining your brow.


Exhilaration

would pulse

veins.


That instant

you felt more alive  

in a sum of whole.




 

Author notes

For a while I was able to be the "ole me"..
my soul needed that..
Written August 22nd, 2006

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  • astralshepherd gold member
    November 9, 2007

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    while i understand, perfectly, the need you have to end the poem with 'i miss that me' to make the personal statement of purpose for having written this brilliant exploration, i think it is not needed. Let the world ponder the poem without your added line, let the mind scream aloud after "That instant you felt more alive in a sum of whole." and allow the reader to appropiate the poem for themselves, to own the lines themselves - you know who its for, what its about, so let the last line go to the wind and all dreams of past will find their own healing along the way.

    You are a brilliant poet. You.

    ~r.


    • Catressa gold member
      November 18, 2007
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      Thank you.. and I took your advice.. you were right.. that last bit seemed like a childish token..

  • Naraku No Hana
    August 23, 2006
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    wow. this is so beautiful and sweet and sad. Wonderful poem


  • -Ang-
    August 23, 2006
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    a wonderful read

    ang


  • Pallas Athena
    August 23, 2006
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    I think you can always be the 'ole you', but it is hard, I realise that. I am glad you are back, and can't wait to talk ot you either!! Athena


  • Frozentearz
    August 22, 2006
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    WE all need to take a step back at times and rekindle the us we used to know the one laying under the layers of life, waiting to
    be freed,
    I enjoyed this poem and I thank you for sharing it
    Love and Light and rediscovery.
    Frozentearz


  • poeticweaver gold member
    August 22, 2006
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    Beautifully inscribed through the wonderful soul's eyes...
    A pleasure reading you~ many blessings sweet one.

    -Timothy


  • esroddo silver member
    August 22, 2006
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    GREAT WRITE

    TRULY WONDERFUL I ENJOYED YOUR WRITE VERY MUCH. THE PICTURE ALSO TOLD THE STORY. YOU COULD ALMOST SEE IT WITH YOUR WORDS

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