Beneath the uniform
The skin, the bone
A troubled child
hides trembling and alone.
Wiping tears from his eyes,
smearing dirt on his face,
the child knows the price
and the danger of this place.
So many have come before,
not all have returned home,
they pay the ultimate price
Flesh, blood, and bone.
Replace the skin and uniform,
place a gun in this childs hands
Give him strength and courage
to exicute your plans.
The soldier hides behind
a veil of pride,
But beneath the uniform
A little boy stands trembling inside
Author notes
Written August 21st, 2006
A contest entry
- Best Poet On AP!Round:1 by wakingdevil.
300 points, ended September 4, 2006, 55 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Emotions. by lilblueeyesmine1978.
450 points, ended December 24, 2007, 44 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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wow
oh yeah. I love this. I will be adding it to the finalists list. this is great writing on your part. I love the emotion and I hope to read more from you maybe after teh contest.
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I like this poem a lot and being an ex-Marine, I can relate. It reminds of the poem I wrote: "All Men Are Little Boys." and we are underneath our uniforms.
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Powerful and amazing.
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Wonderful piece.Very well written with a true thought and great flow to it.Thanks for entering and best of luck
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excellent
This was a very well written and moving piece... an ex-military person myself.. I appreciate the work in this piece. (execute vs. exicute) Excellent work... I wrote a piece called Thank you for the freedom, I can't help but support those who are serving. -
beatiful
amazing! the depth and truth in this poem are stunning and wonderful, bravo. -
Utterly amazing! I love this, the rhyming was good and it flowed smoothly and it was very sad (to think people would be this f-ing cruel... to think that there's war at all
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"beneath the uniform a little boy stands trembling inside"
Such truth you pen with this line, even the strongest men can not with a conscious be anything different. Excellent pen!
Best wishes in this contest, blessings
Sandi
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