Jesus in my life
Now,with two thousand and five
With churchbell memories live
How in his blood and pool
Jesus remained calm and cool
Jesus with his thorny crown
Found me with my own thorn
Suffering ,bleeding on his cross
Crying, weeping on my loss
Followed him a large crowd
Noticing him made me proud
There is ONE to wipe my tears
Supporting me in my fears
Life he made me simple,light
Elevating to scaling height
Helping me to keep my throne
All my deadly worries gone
Author notes
belief in God gives us positive energy to continue life
Written August 21st, 2006
A contest entry
- Lift Me Up Father God by debilynn.
600 points, ended March 5, 2007, 16 entries
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What did you think
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This is a great poem.
Great job.
Thanks for entering my contest.
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I agree 100%! I loved this poem it was beautiful! Keep up the good work! Thanks for entering and good luck!
In Christ,
~Kayla~
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Gorgeous!
It shows how God has helped you through life-- I like it. -
beautiful! thank you for entering
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excellent
great job. this really shows your devotion and love to God. I agree with what is in your author's notes also. excellent job! good luck!
<3 always,
K-Jo
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very well written so glad that you are proud to share your love of Jesus great job
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i am not a christian,so you can take it only as a believer's feeling.i respect all religion.one has to be very strong mentally to be agnostic.we ,poor souls ,can't be as strong as amartial artist mentally and physically
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No offense, but you don't need God to be a positive, energetic, and happy person. I'm all of the above, and I'm agnostic. BUT on to the poetry.
As for most God and Jesus worshipping poetry, yours is basically every other one... rewritten into your own words. The imagery was good, but the cliché of Jesus crucified took it down a notch. Really not bad overall, but needs a bit of clichés removed.
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