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Guitar Strings - Quatrain




His many years had come and gone
his younger days had seen the dawn
So tired and old he took the chance
to give his heart just one last dance

His guitar played that final day
by soothing all his cares away
With a bowed head he said a prayer
as God himself was standing there

“Come with me son, to your new home
a mansion great with golden dome
Your work here is finally through
you've done what, I wanted you to”

So as his song came to an end
he knew with God he would ascend
Leaving behind his guitar strings
traded for his heavenly wings







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The Old Guitarist, 1903 by Pablo Picasso

Quatrain
Written August 19th, 2006

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  • Haiku-bless-you silver member
    March 17, 2008

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    What a beautiful intrepretation of this classic painting. You write with good depth of feeling using a gentle, respectful touch. Well done my friend!
    Good trophy piece!

    Gray Elk (dennis)


  • CookieZeal Greeters member
    November 5, 2007
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    Very nice! I love anything about guitars and how they are instrumental ( no pun intended..lol) in expressing some event, and one as critical as leaving earth. Trading his strings for his new place is a magnificent thought and idea!

    Nicely penned with good iambs throughout. Thank you!
    Congrats on the trophy as well. Warmly, CookieZeal/D


  • Huntress silver member
    August 27, 2006
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    Congratulations


  • FifthDove
    August 23, 2006
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    Thank you very much


  • countrybabe gold member
    August 23, 2006
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    Good Luck

    Great piece you have written here. It fits the picture perfectly. Good luck to you in this contest.

    Keep writing

    Countrybabe


  • Wolf Mistress silver member
    August 22, 2006
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    sounds like music!!

    Wonderful poem Dove,

    You made the painting come a live....
    I almost heard the guitar play for real....

    Great job,
    good luck in the contest,
    XXJeannette


  • catz Moderators member
    August 20, 2006
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    HMMM... I read this earlier and almost swear that I left a comment ...
    well, I know what I'll do.. I'll just go ahead and do it now

    This is a wonderful poem for the picture and a good choice, too. This just happens to be one of my Picasso favorites. There's something about it that touches my soul. And your poem reflects much of that.

    A wonderful poem, Dove Good luck in the contest

    Dee


  • Sarah957
    August 20, 2006
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    Great pick for a picture Dove, it starts tugging at your heart strings before you even read a word. And the poem you wrote to go with it fits well! Its a beautiful story with a great ending

  • Warrior7
    August 20, 2006
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    perfect

    Absolutely perfect Dove


  • FifthDove
    August 19, 2006
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    Thank you

  • Huntress silver member
    August 19, 2006
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    This is very nice you wrote for the picture just right. Good luck in the contest I like this background too

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