my eyes have seen the devil in disguise
and i have heard the cries of the soldiers whom have died
i bear the weight of the karmic fate, seldom too soon but never to late
as I see the the horror they suffered each one,
as they died in the trenches to the bullet and the gun.
Oh lord i pray that we learn from our mistakes,
what price freedom will untimately take
For each life that is lived but tragically dies
Leaves a widow alone in the dark to ask WHY,
Such a widow with once hope but now rage in her eyes
Holds her head up high, but still she cries
When will these needless murders cease?
And prays again for some release
Then hugs her fatherless children close
sad to say, this evil world we never chose.
Still we remain,
and it's our fate,
our love for each other
to over come the hate.
Author notes
beckhi ny 23 dont usually like rhyme but anything for silver
Written August 19th, 2006
A contest entry
- Rhymer's Challenge (Contest, Only for age 10-25) by Raazi.
300 points, ended September 6, 2006, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This is really good!!! I liked it im totally jelous of your talent...well done I was really into the picture that you created in my mind...Keep writing you have superb talent..The opening lines were the really catching factor that made me want to keep reading it!
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Hi NeverBeTheSame,
Firstly, welcome to the contest. I really appreciate your write, truly it was impressive...rhyme might not be so unique but it is definately put of the box.
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dear beckhi,
thank you for a strong message and a poem that should touch many hearts. you are very sensitive to the suffering in the world, and to the suffering within human beings. this quality of soul shines forth through your words, and hopefully provoke some thoughts in the readers.
keep on sharing your sensitivity with the world.
good luck in the contest,
maa -
Maybe somebody will not like it but bravo for your poetic strenght to express such a difficult feelings. Rhyming is not unusual but makes your verses to flow nice. Great done. Good luck.
~Sonja~ -
A most profound penning, good luck
Josephine
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I'll just say that your poems are such that some will love them and some will hate them. Nevertheless, you must not get discouraged by their harsh words or let the praise get to you. Good Luck.
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